Mind Control Story Comments

Amazing work! I'm having a delightful time going through your catalogue. Have to say, this one left me curious about the epilogue, whether Ramon and Becky get together. I'd like to think they do; despite how "sleazy" he's described (and he is), I think they'd make a cute couple.

I too am hoping that this is just the opening salvo and there's more incestuous / mind-controlled feminization to follow! ❤️🔥

I'm enjoying these stories in difference to other mind-control themes where the woman is mistreated and led into debauchery.

You handle the theme with love and compassion from both sides, Stirring the emotions for the reader as well.

Amusing. But is this a dream or a nightmare for Noah and Luis?

About Nia's control: I think it would work in the following way:

Oracle first matches someone against the primary (usually the male, now the female Nia). If that match is good enough, then the program checks to see whether the new woman can fit in with all the rest of the team. The...

Intereating start, although i hope there won't be any more death. Plus i hope the protagonist manages to keep at least some of his humanity and doesn't turn evil like the writer of the manifesto, there are more than enough stories like that on this site.

Hari is so sexy when he is risking his entire poly families lives by playing the hero. I also love the way most of his girls have nothing to do but wait for their turn to get fucked by him.

<3

really confer on this one. Weird he's treating Becca as HUS mistress,

It's good to give.

You never disappoint. Kudos for another awesome chapter. Keep them coming and keep us guessing.

Brilliant chapter. It's a shame about Jimmy.

FLR only makes sense. Since women are by far superior to us males it only makes sense that the women are in charge and one thing I know that reminds me of that is when the males in a family are always naked while the girls and women are clothed, regardless of who our guests are....

Brilliant. One suggestion I would like to make is when Pete presumably catches up with Marco, he should use Marco's apparent Acrophobia, which he seemed to display when he stood atop Pete's city wall, as a weapon against him. I'm already looking forward to the next update.

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Great story! Really enjoyed the twists and turns.

My biggest problem isn't that he's weak, but that he enslaved Sophia despite her definitely not asking for it, and having no idea if it would turn out well or she'd be brain dead. Just wildly goes against everything else he's done.

I love and hate this in a very sweet way. God I just want to be wanted, and it’s messed up how I feel that more when reading something supernatural, by nature, impossible, than I do in real life. What is it like to be the center of someone’s desires? Forget multiple people, just to...

That was a pretty sudden shift in Seb character. Not willing to do anything to my best friend is my slave. Oh well, things moving along at least.

Omg pls keep the story going!! <3

Time for mommy to listen to some soothing sounds.

Good idea, fantastic execution

Next part might take a bit, as I need to do some heavy thinking about where I want this to go.

Never just good or bad, always mixed bag

Incredible story. Please keep writing! It would be fantastic as a series

This is a great exploration of some very weird stuff, a lot of fun.

I am impotent. A combination of age and diabetes. But I would still want a copy of the book if it existed.

Thank you for the comments and reads.

I'm working on another chapter finally.

Mommy means business.

I have been tearing through this story the past few days, and it really is a marvel. I’ve read silly parodies (Everyone Loves My Ass jumps to mind). I’ve read over-the-top genre riffs (The Defiled Temple). I’ve read earnest melodramas (anything by Xarth). But the way you balance the...

Mind control soap opera

Really like the overall story. Liked it better when you updated the points frequently. Writing is still clumsy and challenging to get through, primarily because its 2nd person perspective. Lastly, its irritating that some of them call him Junior when he told them he hated it. ...

Poor Veronica.

That ancient command to Sophia is nice.

Just a couple girls hanging out.

Loved it...wish I could do that in real life!!!!!!

Enjoying it, not sure why other commenters stick around if they don't like it.