by BlewWater69
The plot was going along nicely until the switch to sub/dom, which seemed out of place. After that it just became stilted and forced.
Since your story was "a fantasy" from the start; you could have had several girls in several different rooms; rather than all the guys gang-banging Trish. It would have added some complexity to the scene.
has been mentioned in today's New Story Review Thread in the Author's Hangout found in the forum.
What a Halloween night! Being sexually attacked by Monsters. This Writer has a vivid imagination and puts it to good use as he plots the course of this story. A fun Read!
Good luck in the contest!