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by BlewWater69

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duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Erotic Fun!

What a Halloween night! Being sexually attacked by Monsters. This Writer has a vivid imagination and puts it to good use as he plots the course of this story. A fun Read!

Good luck in the contest!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Your Story

has been mentioned in today's New Story Review Thread in the Author's Hangout found in the forum.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Realistically

Since your story was "a fantasy" from the start; you could have had several girls in several different rooms; rather than all the guys gang-banging Trish. It would have added some complexity to the scene.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Disjointed

The plot was going along nicely until the switch to sub/dom, which seemed out of place. After that it just became stilted and forced.

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I hope what you read is entertaining to you. That is all I intend. I try to appeal to many readers, so if one aspect or another of a story is not to your liking, please just ignore and move on.