by Tony155
I am almost afraid of cavities :) I can't have Jimmy and Donna play the parts, and now Johnathan Winters can't be the spirit, but Robin Williams still could. Let's see . . .
Lynn
I really loved this one, too! You write so well that I want to read more. Great Job!
Tony. From a romance lover who absolutely adores happy endings, that was wonderfully done and very sweet and sappy. You deserve a 10. Good luck in the contest.
is not necessarily a bad thing. LOL
It was a sweet story, but I would have liked to know what happened with their Christmas lunch.
Good luck.
Black Tulip
And totally wonderful. I will never apologize for being a romantic; if we lose that we become cynical and jaded. Thank you for a fantastic read. Good luck!
Cookie :)
What a great story!It tells that love and hope still exist, even in this cynical world that we live in nowadays.
Like Dicken's Christmas story. When you see the movie every year, you know how it's going to end, yet you still watch it. Why? Because it makes you feel good. same with your story. It makes you feel good. Thank You. Ronnie W.
I realy loved your story. I hope you write another soon, but I hope there is a little more sex in it. LOL. I wish you luck.
KISSES,
Angel ;)
Sorry to be the voice of dissent here, but I was totally unimpressed by this story. I found it to be extremely saccharin, often pretentious, and completely predictable. And breaking down such a short story into five or six "chapters" was unnecessary.
The only thing I would say is it could have used more detail perhaps. I wanted to hear about what happened on their Christmas day, but it was very romantic and perfect for the Holiday season :)
Good luck and Happy Holidays,
Ali
This was sweet. Where can I sign up for one of these angels? That last line is killer. Wow. Good luck!
I really enjoyed reading this story! It was very well written with a lot of detail. You have the makings of a wonderful author (professional) unless you already are one?
I think it would be great if we all had "angels" like this to guide us toward our loved ones. There is another story like this on Literotica by Stefan J. which features almost exactly the same theme. The title escapes me, but it was part of a Halloween contest one year. In it, a girl that was killed in adolescence comes back to life in order to point the male protagonist of the story toward his true love. Are you familiar with it? Thanks for sharing this gem!
Concise, to the point, very romantic and uplifting. Your writing is excellent. I look forward to your next post!