by oggbashan
Very nice very subtle. I like to read the better authors in order to learn. This plot has a lot of teachable moments.
Thank you for sharing
WHY was Candice cheating on George with Harold by kissing him and sitting on his lap??? Would she have done that in George's presence? Once a cheat always a cheat. She WILL hurt George in the future.
I don't know what that was. A side track about Candice's wedding. A nice little story but it seemed to do nothing to advance the Lisa/Thomas storyline. I'm confused. This seems out of place and a chapter you refer to about a clam is missing in action. Oh well. Onward.
You're never going to get me to vote you into last place this way :) ! I enjoyed it Dude.
Pygmalion, Oggbashan style. A well-done, fun read. IMHO, it doesn't have a chance for last place.
Rumple
turned swan. Beautiful story of transformation, wonderfully told.
Sorry, Og, I had to give you a 5-er.
Very nice portrayal of emotion... but you forced me to 5 bomb it!
This was great fun. I enjoyed the progression of the story and its characters. Thank you for writing. :)
This was quite the read, but it was worth it. Your mind is truly a thing of wonder and a joy to behold. Never mind me Ogg, I'm feeling inadequate. *wink* Good luck!
This was a great portrayal of a woman's feelings of insecurity and inadequacy in her efforts to transform herself for her soon-to-be husband.
Sorry for the pithy title. It's just my reaction to this story set amid this usually heavy handed femdom series. I honestly hesitated to read it since I hadn't enjoyed any of the three predecessors that I've read.
However this story turned out to be more along the lines of a loving story, even with the frequent cuts taken at her husband to be's mildly submissive personality.
My reaction anyway, others may differ as is their right.