by Penelope Street
What a wonderful little love story, full of angst and unfulfilled emotion. Your writing is superb. Iām so glad I found your site. An easy 5-ššššš
This isn't a romance, it is a cheating wife/loving wife story!
You are a fantastic story teller. The story finished as I suspected but the twists and turns leading to completion very terrific. THANK YOU.
Well-paced, with a gradual unfolding of your characters which keeps up the reader's interest. Dialogue "sounded" real without the difficulties of duplicating "real" speech. Danielle's difficulties were well-planned before you started writing and so skillfully foreshadowed. I didn't get quite the same sense with Craig, but as you were saving his situation for the reveal at the end, that's fair. Good romantic story - even the sex was romantically drawn! Very well done indeed. I look forward to reading what comes next in your queue!
In your limited space you build your main characters like a Shakespeare. Given the latitude of a full length novel I am sure you are (or could be) a published author.
An excellent story well delivered that kept me captivated to the very end. Thank you, Penelope.
~ Dave
You write so very well, with realistic converstations that convey so much feeling and action. I was moved to tears of joy more than twice. I can't wait to read the rest of your stories here. Are there other stories or books that you have written? I would gladly buy them. Keep writing, please.
Well, damn. I came here as you are part of Group A, in Minsue's writerly contest and I thought to just try to get an idea of your style.
You brought tears to my eyes twice, when each revealed the truth, but I am a sentimental sap anyway, so it may not mean much.
I do feel like I have discovered a writing soulmate, as they way you played with emotions and circumstances is so like some of my work that it felt uncanny. Never mind that I named a daughter, my youngest one and last one, Penelope also, my Penny.
I must add, to be honest, that the style of the ending, the words you chose, disappointed me, but that is a stylistic opionion and not a criticism.
So a couple hours later, I know I will not have enough energy left to continue trying to determine each of the authors in our little exercise but it was a thoroughly worthwhile and pleasurable diversion and it was of my own choosing, although I did not expect to be drawn to read until the conclusion, but I just had to know the ending.
Thank you
Amicus....John Cole
Penny,
You may actually write better than you critique, and that's saying a lot. I'm not sure, though. I'll have to re-read this before I can make a final decision. But seriously, that was a fine piece of writing.
Rumple
Nicely portrayed story of insecurity.
After all the fabrication, I fear for 'what happens next'!
Penny,
You are a wicked, wicked girl! Love lost, hopes dashed, flames flicker in the breeze of life only to be fiercly rekindled as they consume two happy lovers. That was beautifully writen. You've a wonderful way of setting the mood as your stories progress. BRAVO!!! Please, take another bow for your audience.
Sincerely,
Mike
Great story of regrets, lost opportunities and second chances. Nicely done!
Oh, darling. This was such a pretty story. And it all turned out rather intense in the end. A+, lovey. Marvelous. :)
What a lovely story.
So nice to see two people manage to overcome their fear and find each other.
Well done.