All Comments on 'The Lady in the Purple Dress'

Welcome to Lit

With your first piece here.

My only comment for your thought is

You seem to have cut it off in mid-thought.

For a first entry - your poem was lovely, delicate and expressed the longings and yearnings of the human soul.

Exquisitely written! Very enjoyable!

I liked the flow of this. The only line that seemed off in terms of the meter was "If only I could forgive my sin".

The abrupt ending matches the disappointment of the narrator.