- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Sorrow (11,11,12,12)
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Click hereI once felt sorrow for the Cherry blossom,
Whipped and beaten in the late winter winds.
It gave its offering’s too early in the year,
Battered and torn before the arrival of spring.
By summer it was a painful memory,
Distant yet as vivid as the real thing.
But this autumn I found why I was mistaken,
Saw how my sympathy was selfish and misplaced.
I saw emptiness in my life yet felt joy,
Remembered that moments are only fleeting.
Finally learning to love without holding on,
Has allowed me to finally forget my pain.
- COMMENTS
sackabout 19 years agowith a little paring down. The two "finallys" at the end are awkward... there are a lot of synonyms for finally, it should be a simple matter to find one. Elsewhere, I don't think you need an apostrophe on offerings and I don't quite understand the Cherry analogy. My cherry tree is very pretty in Autumn when the leaves turn yellow...perhaps using Winter would have insured a starker contrast?
flyguy69about 19 years agoA pure and plaintive treatment of redemption- very nice, TD!
