All Comments on 'Sorrow (11,11,12,12)'

by Trent_Dutch

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flyguy69 about 19 years ago

Clear and clean

A pure and plaintive treatment of redemption- very nice, TD!

Anonymousabout 19 years ago

this poem

is mentioned in the new poetry reviews.

sack about 19 years ago

I think this would read much better....

with a little paring down. The two "finallys" at the end are awkward... there are a lot of synonyms for finally, it should be a simple matter to find one. Elsewhere, I don't think you need an apostrophe on offerings and I don't quite understand the Cherry analogy. My cherry tree is very pretty in Autumn when the leaves turn yellow...perhaps using Winter would have insured a starker contrast?

WickedEve about 19 years ago

very, very nice

I love the cherry blossom stanza.

My Erotic Tale about 19 years ago

I can not tell a LIE

It wasn't me!!!! <grin>

excellent poem~

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