by sweetnpetite
i really enjoyed reading this story! it is very well writen.
i could almost see the two characters.
The rest looked a bit cartoonish.
Well written, believable characters, nice build up, beautiful sexy scenes. What else? Its beautiful! :)
The poor spelling and grammar really detracted from the flow of the story. Maybe consider running it past a volunteer editor.
I loved the story ! Great idea... but do agree, the spelling errors did distract from the flow of the story! Id be happy to review a story for you before u post !!
Just reading this made me cum you sound so sexy I would love to rub my pussy all over you! Wow I'm so horny and this just made my night amazing!
THANKYOU!!!!
Your story is not only sexy but also very full of love. I can see the wonderfull body and face of Zoe and the love between the two women.
It is a special and very wonderfull story. Keep on the good work!
best regarards
J. E. Kelter, Denmark
I have a giant crush on a girl named Zoe (I'm a girl) and it was super easy to visualize this Zoe as my Zoe and myself as Nicole. It was lovely!