All Comments on 'Yule Be Sorry'

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That's all, just dumb.

I agree.....D-U-M-B! It was a good story until the ending, which was very stupid. It could have been much more erotic, but you had to invent law enforcement action on a consenting adults story.

The sex was good enough, but the rest? Could have really done with out the suicides of the sisters, as well as the end with him ending up on death row. Otherwise intersting concept for a story, just ultimately a little too dark for my taste.

I think you have a great idea here, but you tried to put too much of a story into too little of a space.

Hate it!

Curious story line, but everyone knows there is a St. Nick.

Sorry, dumb response to a dumb story.

This isn't erotic literature--its smut!

I viewed it as more of a comedy and personally enjoyed it. So everything ends badly... Point? Thigs don't always have to end in "a blisfully sexual joy." This story was definitly made to short, but other than that I don't see anyones complaints.

Well there's something i never knew about st nick. got a tad far fetched about them using Santa as a spy etc..and the suicides made it a bit too dark for my liking. but apart from that. not all bad.

are you trying to punish everyone who enjoys some yule/incest-smut? I liked the Santa angle and the descriptive parts were good but it didn't really need the suicide and death sentence.

Oh, let's face it -- we all posture about erotic 'literature', but it's _all_ smut. This one was genuinely funny. And sick. But then, I read it, didn't I?

Hahaha, a dark christmas tale chock full of incest,

suicide, and death. A sexy dark comedy, I'd say.

Well done.

one of a kind. appreciate the dark humor. funny end and great funny ending. thanks for being unique.

I understand this might not be to everyone's taste, but personally I loved it! A decent back story, good sex scene and an interesting twist at the end, not so long that it bores me, absolutely spot on! Please keep on writing more stories.

This story was very interesting

This story was very interesting

Great story, but it would have been better without the ending.

This is my most fave story. Ever. :)

loved it

Totally loved it!

Your ending could of had a happier ending. It was a complete turn-off the way you ended this story.

Nice story with old saint nick dropping his lump of coal on the girls but the end just killed the mood man. Bummer man.

I would have killed that neighbor... anyhow the ending is very blue ballin man. -_-

I really liked the story. Keep the ending; it goes perfect with everything else. Thank you!

the story was amazing! until the ending. i was wet and ready to jump into my bed for a little bit of amusement but now i have to read another, because the ending killed the mood. sorry, but it did. you are a great writer though, and i hope you keep writing because you have great potential. just work on that ending!

The ending was stupid murder rape ect but no evidence!

The ending was silly actually the whole thing was a bit because no one in this world at 18 still believes in Santa and no young girls would ever fantacise having sex with Santa. It would be nicer with your great writtng skill to have a straight father/daughter story.

With an ending like this, who needs true crime? So much for the spirit of Christmas.

Rather than point out the obvious, which has been underscored by way too many people, let me comment on what seems not to have been addressed.

Your writing actually shows promise. You clearly have no flair for the ultra-short story, but I imagine that if you stretched this story out about, well, twice the number of words, your detail would overcome some of the criticisms. You have a great command of the English language and (at least up to the point that I stopped reading), you seem to be able to tell a story.

I fear your talent will never fully come to fruition until you start writing about things that actually occurred that you have some actual knowledge of. No seriously. Your writing is at the college/semi-pro level and your execution of your idea is at the 3rd grade free-writing level. I have never read such a horrible story so well written.

If you keep writing, you will figure it out and find yourself among the "published" and successful writers of the world. So, I encourage you to keep trying (notwithstanding this obvious failure.)

All you need is a little more heart and a little more action plus a better ending then this would be perfect

This story is certainly different. Not quite sure what to make of it!

Thanks

Len

This was pretty funny. Twisted...but funny.

what a stupid story......

It isn't obvious from the start that this is a comedy on travesty making it look silly and sex negative.

The links between Nick and every tragedy wasn't funny or strong enough. "Sledge marks were found at the scene."

The "MAGIC BIG COCK" was cut for time and what a shame it was.

What the fuck was this

Meh, SHOULD have ended with him breaking out, and saving his daughters, while killing the fat bastard in the progress... After all, he apparently takes advantage of girls that think their xmas gifts are from HIM... :) A dead Santa would be more satisfying :)

Ending ruined the story