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by fallenangel_jaded
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Black Tulipover 18 years agoGood idea
The idea for the story is a good one, but I think you could use more dialogue. Let your characters speak instead of you telling us.
And it would be wise to find someone to edit your stories. Your sentences are sometimes hard to follow and that's a pity.
Good luck.
Black Tulip
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