All Comments on 'What Chocolate Mousse Can Do'

I have to say that this is one of my new favorite stories. You really caught and held my attention and the whole idea was amazing. Thank you for showing me it's not weird for me to like to watch two guys. THANK YOU!

Thanks for a great story. I love the little bi interplay. Good build up too. Will you let us know what will happen with Shannon, please?

Wow. Just ... wow! Steaming, steaming hot sex action in a beautiful setting. It's rare that I find a story this wild sexually with such good work with character depth and development. I love every single thing about this story! Brilliant work, Carson.

Another wonderful tale full of emotion and smoking hot sex. I think this might be my favorite of your body of work so far. I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next! Love, T

I love reading your work! The detail and the characters. This was a classic and I would love for you to tell us more about Shannon and Ben.

This is a fabulous piece of work. Character development and the sense of environment are flawless. It's got humor, feeling, optimism and heat. This is an outstanding story.

I usually don't enjoy MMF literature as some other categories, but this story was fabulous. Your writing skills, paired with the steamy plot, are unmatched in the stories i have read. well done and congratulations on a spectacular story- scorpio20

I didn't even know that I liked guy/guy action until reading this! This story has me so damn hot, and i LOVED that there was actually a story involved with all that hot sex!

I've seen in my two years reading on Lit. So unusual, so sensual, so sweet without being cloying in the least. Thanks.

I tried. I honestly did. But it just didn't work for me. Although it apparently did for others. Thanks for you hard work.

Story line, character development and the sex come together perfectly. This is off the scale in erotisism. I tip my hat...this gives me a whole new bar of excellence to reach.

Really great story. There is even character development. One of my favorites on Literotica. Kudos.

This is by far one of the best stories that I have read on Lit. So often the stories that contain bisexual action are coarse and have little plot. You have brought a sense of beauty to the them and I hope that you continue this theme.

Absolutely fantastic and very very erotic - more, please!

ever read in my life; while from Literotica, mainstream fiction/romance or erotica. You should feel very proud of this story.

I don't have anything much to add, other than that is the most amazing, sexual and beautiful story I have ever read online. Thanks.

freaken hot

Carson,

As usual you have astounded us all again. I feel like you have dipped into my fantasies and pulled one out, putting your pen to paper to record it here. You are truly one of the most talented writers here and I for one feel you are ready for the big leagues. Thank you for letting "the girls" inspire you to write one for us. And for allowing people to see that women are turned on by gay men just as easily as men are turned on by lesbianism, all with respect and dignity. NEVER STOP WRITING, PLEASE!

This story was amazing! I loved it from the beginning to the end. I was so sad whenever I saw that it was over. I hope to continue to write more! Defintly one of the best stories I have yet to read on this site!

This story has all my dreams come true. Will no doubt be reading it over & over & over again lol. Well done Carson!!! Just loved all the interaction between all of the characters wether it be clubbin or lovin great.

absolutely delicious--a *real* pleasure to read and enjoy--thank you!!

now it is one of my favorite things. I have a nurse friend that I shared the story with, and the next time we had dinner she made chocolate mousse! ...but that is another story.

Witty, sexy, fun, lively story. It took a while to read but this was very rewarding. I'm glad you've gotten a lot of nice comments about it. Best, Sack

*I think my favorite part is the last line of the story.*

The characters just play off of each other. Friendship, sexuality, fantasy, witty, and filled with a deep love. Wonderful! I can't wait to read more.

Okay, this time I'm not holding back on my comments. This story was just too good. I pinted it out, all 32 pages, and read it late at night. I deliberately waited until night to have it as a sort of dessert, and it did not disappoint. I was getting mad about 10 pages into because I know that soon it would end. That feeling got worse as I read on and with only 4 pages left couldn't bear to accept the fact that it had to. I almost refused to read the last page, feeling that if I didn't the story would never end. I can imagine how Shannon feels now at the end and be happy knowing that Kyle took care of her and gave her her life back. It was perfectly written with a style and polish of that of a Hollywood blockbuster. To give a short and to the point review, it is what every GOOD story should be. It wasn't smut, it wasn't sex, it wasn't bland repeated actions on a page. It was a great STORY. That's what I loved most about this work. You took great care in plotting out the exact course of your buildup that the moment in which the action happens, I felt as pent up and teanse as Shannon did. That kind of tennsion really drew me in and gave me the same cathartic release as Shannon when it was over. To have fantasies is one thing. They are our perfect world where we know we control everything in that world. Shannon said it perfectly that her fantasies were never like this, the reality. I related a lot to Shannon, but my "David" was/is, my dad and mom. I am just now getting back who I was before all that crap. This story gives hope to those like us. The hope the life is better, that people are better, that we ourselves our better, if we only put away that little voice and listen to our hearts and friends. Thank you. Dave.

This is one of my fantasies and you definalty make me want to pursue it.

i dont normally get into the guy on guy thing, but this story was so sweet and romantic, great story, hope to see more like it from you

This was so freaking hot.. I didn't expect a story this marvellous when I started reading it randomly.. It has everything I could ever wish for. Please do keep up the good work and post more..

Hi! Liked it, but I've read it before, so what is it doing on the "new" list?

It has been a really long time since I just completely enjoyed a story here enough to want to comment on it. This story was wonderful, thank you for sharing with us.

Always, E

Not to nitpick, but isn't this story recycled?

Let's see . . . great sex . . . characters . . . a plot . . . background . . . Darn it, it IS too good to be true! Now, about part 2 . . .

:D

To the anonymous poster who asked if this story is recycled: actually it was submitted to Lit several months ago. There was a mistake in the formatting so I had to resubmit it, and it has shown up on the "NEW" list by no design of my own. If you've read it before, feel free to skip it. If not, thanks and I hope you enjoyed it.

Carson.

This is the first time I've ever commented on a story, but I thought it was the perfect one to start with. Normally, this isn't what I would be drawn to but I swear I've never been so entranced by anything I've read on here yet. Not only was the story highly erotic you write very well. The characters were incredibly real and I'd read it just cause it's good, not just the sex! Keep up the good work!

Wow. Normally I tend to pass up "group sex" stories because they're always some fantasy about some guy getting two women at once. Typical and quite often boring. Your story is very atypical and beautifully erotic! Wow. I have gay male friends. Your story makes me wish that I had gay male friends that would do this with me! Whooeeee!!!!

But I vaguely remember this story with a totally different ending. I like this ending better. Even the sex scenes are much better. Kudos

It's been a long time since I've laughed and cried through a story whether it be typical reading or erotica. Your story was so well written I felt as though I had a window into Shannon's life. I must also agree with another poster - I've got guy friends who are gay and really would like a gift like that from them!

Please bring another story to us soon.

Carson, your stories are even more addictive than chocolate... please don't stop writing; I can't get enough!

Please continue with the story of Shannon and Ben :)

Everyone was right about you- you give great story! Loved it!!

I echo the request for more about Shannon and Ben

OMG! A workable plot with realistic characters... Keep up the good work...

Jenna

PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!! I LOVED IT!!!!!!

I have to admit, this is my first "Carson read" and I was very impressed. I think I will definately have to check out more of your stories. There's an interesting poll going on in the forum right now ... "girls who like boiz who like boiz".

I think I'm definately going to have to go vote now ...

{muah}

You are definately simply_delicious

Okay, I'm now going to stammer like the incoherent fangirl that I am. That was breathtaking. It makes me whimper with happiness.

It's the... the everything about it. Kyle and Stephan and Shannon, and it just feels so right and beautiful and I absolutely adore the three of them. Some of the things they say--'that's it exactly', I thought.

Wow. Squee. Um. Yay.

How is it- that you write all the stuff about relationships that I'm not able to?

YOu write with magnificent assuredness, not only this story, but every one I've read. Your storytelling sings, you invent phrases, your situations are universal but never hackneyed. That's amazing. And encouraging. And devastating. Count me among your fans, from now on...

I'm getting tired of praising you already...LOL

*jacking my own comment*

OK the security code I've been given for this comment is 6911...is that the number you call for emegency sex? LMAO

Perfect story! It's like you read my diary!!!! Every gal needs two hot gay friends!!! Even better is when they let you join in and watch!!! I haven't checked, but I hope there is a part 2!!

From one fag hag to the next!!

So I couldn't sleep tonight, and I thought, "Hey, I'll go read something of Carson's." It popped into my head and I ran with it. (Ok, to be accurate I plopped my butt down in front of the computer and my eyes ran with it.) In any case, I absolutely adore your characters and the way their story unravelled. Count me among the newest of your fans, from one freaky dork to another. :)

I adored it! It was simply amazing. Thank you for the tingles this stunning story gave me!

I read this at least once a month. Please, please post more!

not only parts of my life here but alot of my fantasies too!!! write on you have a loyal fan.

I'm amazed, thankful and feel a little stupid now. I thought just like Shannon for awhile. Harboring a fantasy about two guys, that made me so incredibly HOT I thought I was a freak. Stupid right? I just can't find words for how your writing has change me for the better. You are so talented and every single story has me captivated. Thank you so much for these incredible stories and feeding our fantasies.

I had an abusive husband like that. JUST like that.

At first I thought you were going to do something to get back at him... but this is even better! What a gorgeous story. Makes me feel so sexy and triumphant as if Shannon was acting for all mental abuse victims, me included.

WOW!!! Amazingly sweet and hot story, one that won't disappoint. I wish I could be Shannon at least once. See you sparked a new fantasy. :) You are such a great story teller.

oh I just loved this story mmmm thank you so much.

I will never look at chocolate mousse quite the same lol

This story is just amazing. More than once I thought this deserves to be a book or at least featured in a magazine. It made me think "wow I need friends like that". Not for the sexual part but for the being there part. It's worth reading all the 5 pages of it. During the entire story I felt like I was being there but as a silent watcher. I think this is the best story I've read here on Literotica.

I think it's amazing that Kyle and his boyfriend decided to do that for Shannon cause it shows just how much they care for her. Thank you for writing this story.

Reading your story,all though fiction, I relize that I'm as abusive and controlling. I know that no one cares, but I'm tired and need a forum.I'm 39 and think I'm bi or gay but deffinatly curious problem is I'm in a broken 13 year hetro realationship. Angry with myself. Love her but not the way she wants.Don't know how to say to her don't want to hurt her. I'm weak but very strong?Lonely.stupid.Thank you for an interesting point of view.

The inside joke tied it together for me.

And I've one again discovered myself in awe.

Really enjoyed the whole story, well written and very well balanced. Thank You.

Mmmmmmmmmm! So yumm! I want to make chocolate mousse at once if it provides me with such hot guys too! :D

Thank you, that was an awesome read!!!

i guess there's a lot of women out there that LOOOOVEEE to watch two hot sexy men get it on! I guess I'm not the only one! lol

AMAZING! SO SEXY!!

that was absolutely fabulous, i loved the details , and i mean LOVED :D

For a moment there I thought this story was about me! I'm a straight woman, and I love seeing an intimate moment between two men. It really gets me hot. I've been kind of embarrassed about it for a while, but reading this makes me realize that I'm not the only one. Well done!

Loved it!

Only I want to be one of the men. Always fantasize about having sex with a man and a woman. Straight as a arrow but really fasinated. Keep up the good work. Really kept me on the edge of my seat and turned me on just as you had wished.

makes this here girly wanna be the meat in a sexy gay male sandwich :P

wow that was hot,i'd love to be a part of that!

Well worth reading and it proves that not all "gay" guys are strictly gay, some like gals also. pwrain@gmail.com

That sounds like the most wonderful experience ever! I've always wanted to have more than one guy, but since they always seem to just want to get off and not give back I just keep that little fantasy in my head. This story is so sexy and beautiful at the same time. Thank you for writing it.

My idea of a perfect relationship is two bi guys and me. I love watching guys together but all the straight guys are so rigid and stuffy and selfish and immature. It's not fair. I just wish someone would look at me like I'm chocolate mousse. But no one ever does even though I'm pretty sure I'm good looking. All I ever get is furtive glances at my tits before they realise they've been caught and look way for good. I don't mind them staring, I just wish they'd have the balls to own up and follow up with a chocolate mousse grin. Sadly, the last time anyone looked at me that was years ago and it was a seventeen year old, half my age. Perhaps I should have offered to help him with his homework.

This has always been my fantasy to not only be with two guys but gay guys...LOVE this LOVE IT LOVE IT. The best I've read yet

It makes a fascinating comparison of this story of a woman with two (mostly) gay men:

http://www.literotica.com/s/under-instruction

omg, this was such a hot story... i would love to be shannon and have a stephan and kyle in my life. they wouldn't even have to touch me as long as i could just watch.

It is interesting how few group sex stories there are where two men get to mess around. Plenty of girls going at it, but this story is one of a very few on this site (or anywhere) were guys get to have sex with women and men. As a mostly strait guy who finds this really hot, I would just like to thank the author for helping to fill this hole in the literature.

So hot Carson. You are a masterful storyteller. I love how you took me inside Shannon's head. Got me hard, got me thinking about abuse, got me thinking about rigid sexual identities. Brilliant stuff.

where oh where have you gone?????

Great story.

Loved it

And what gorgeous characters you create

I loved seeing the "safe gay best friend" go in this direction. So hot!

WOW

No one who hasn't had their ego beaten down to nothing can really understand how another person can get into your head and stay. Simply stay. How who you were goes away. You forget who you were before and can't quite figure out who to be after. Amazing glimpse into an abused person's mind. And freaking hot on top of that. All sweet and incredibly emotive as always, and still freaking hot as hell.

Did I mention this story is hot?

Sweet with a Capital "S"

LOVED this, and I never read gay Lit-tag on this pulled me in and so glad it did!

-her petite body, biggest 'O!' to date as she watches them make out ...

them getting her off-what a present!-they're both great! and her experiencing her first ever whopper courtesy of Kyle...hopefully vet she meets at end also packing...!

Easy 5 and fave, really 1st rate, great characters, and going to mine the Similar Stories for more like this