by Cunfucus
Actually, the story was quite good (and, remarkably for Literotica, was free of spelling and grammatical errors!). It had just the right touch of realism with eroticism, wasn't heavy-handed porn and was refreshing to read. I hope you'll write more in the future!
an innocuous, innocent story. I agree something is missing, perhaps the white heat of inspiration?
Holy smokes Batman, you can come and play with me anytime..haha.. Good stuff there... Good luck!
Not quite erotic enough but I don't know what it actually lacked, either. Something was missing in this story.