All Comments on 'Unexpected'

A sensual and well written piece of work.

The build up and description of the emotions the central character felt was done well. The writing had a rich taste without being excessive.

Well done.

Excellent story and great writing... you make most of the other authors here look like hacks... Thank you for taking the time and effort to make this a truly outstanding piece of work.

Thought it was great and you write very well!!! Hope to read more f your work ;)

Thank you for writing a story that sensually describes the "unexpected" encounter. Other writers write as if they are describing a porn movie instead of a realistic situation. So many could learn from you that writing about the 38DD's or the 10-inch "throbbing monster" does not make a story erotic...just write a sharp, intelligent, and sexy story and let the readers imagination take over. I look forward to your further writings!!!

Very well written, excellent build-up... most enjoyable...thank you

i truly loved this story, it was one of the best erotic stories i have ever read, thank you!

Your story has been mentioned in the New Story Reviews in the Author's Hangout.

Wow! That is hot! In a league by itself!

Great story, nice build up. The discription of

the sex is hot.

...incredibly erotic, great build up, and well written. I liked that you used the girls pov, and revealed her deepest thoughts.

Well done, please keep writing!

Thanks for sharing, have a great day,

~Sky~

Very well written and moving. The descriptive contrasts between characters is well thought out and keeps the readers interest. The story built to a satisfying climax and the erotic scenes were brilliantly vivid. Would love to read more about what happens in the life of Leah and Edwin. Please continue, I am left wanting more. Keep up the great work!

I loved your story!! These are the kinds of love stories that any woman can relate to. Your story is what I call juicy. Please write more when you can.

This is the way that it should be, not just your story but also the act of making love. A slow build up of desire which leads to the delights that only passion can bring to our lives.

Anybody that is not affected by your story is not made of flesh and blood.

Unbelievably erotic - sensual, arousing and yet endearing. If only all our first lovers were as considerate. I think I fell a little bit in love with Edwin. I'd have a curry at his house any time

Why did you end it there? You have the excellent beginnings of a series of stories. What happens when her father finds out? Do she and Edwin stay together? WHAT HAPPENS NEXT??? LOL

At last, a story with credible, very real human beings who are not mere sex machines! Just what the site needs.

omg i loved it.... amazing.

This is just how I would want it to be if I ever got that ever coveted older man...

excellent story, written beautifully!

I loved it! It made me beyond aroused. I loved the connection between the two characters. :) GREAT story. Place write more!! :)

Excellent story. You have talent as a writer. A mature story in more than one aspect.

Dear Angel:

Having just reading your story for the first time, I will tell you that your story is one of the best I've ever read at this site in 10 years. Certainly, it's in the top 5.

You write exceptionally well. Descriptive yet not gross. More like a beautiful tango than a dirty dance. You revealed each other's emotionas as well as their physical artful movements.

As for this older man, I would say your story was, in a single word, delicious. Ray in Maine

wonderfully written story. i love all of your submissions. but i just have one complaint...why is there no oral sex on the womans behalf? nothing more arousing than reading about a woman getting eaten out, in detail.

This is a very well written story. I loved it.

I have read all your submissions and they are very good. Please continue with more.

briliant first story love it. so much. you had my full attention in more ways than one. really love the writing to.

This is awesome.

Such a great story. I totally loved it!

I've now read your latest and your first. Your talent was obvious even then, although "Seeing Stars" is my very favorite so far.

Please continue this is so hot!!

I am in my 50's and fantasize about meeting a Leah. Unfortunately, it has been just a fantasy, and I thank you for letting me be satisfied with the love and tender love I give to Leah as I live your story. How I wish I could please her, hold her, satisfy her! Thank you, again. May the gods smile on me some day! Until then, I love your story.

So very hot and erotic! Thank you for sharing this perfectly written gem!

Thanks for writing an honest depiction of that particular taboo....I Felt every word! Great Job..

Is missing

I want it to end with her moving in, maybe losing the punk look and becoming a bit of a bookworm, but loving to read him erotic novels when the shop is slow, until he is frantic with need for her.

Her father put through changes as she starts just making art.

WMM

I absolutely fell in love with Edwin right along with Leah. And oh lord, I want a sequel so desperately. I tempted to write on myself just for me! :P

It was great, thank you!

What a fantastic read! Thank you....

The texture is amazing

Just a couple of minorish snags - for me:

“Which pretty much sums up the reason why I found myself kicked out”

The noun reason is synonymous with “The why”

So why say “the why why”?

Many don't get this.

Spelling/typo?

"I opened my eyes to see a reverant look on his face."

You write well!

Leah's father is a bastard!! STORY WOULD HAVE BEEN GREAT IF KARMA OR SOME TRAGEDY LIKE HIS DICK FALLING OFF, COULD HAVE BEFALLEN THE BASTARD FATHER

Another incomplete story by this pathetic writer!!

What happened to daddy and Moira....maybe they choked on a shrimp!! He is a bastard father.....we need part 2 where Moira cheats on him

I’ve read all your stories and although there great most of them don’t have an ending

Where’s the rest of the story there’s so many questions to be answered