All Comments on 'Two Years after Valentine's Day'

Good job Mun... but if you wanted in our last place contest... I have bad news.... it is just too good to qualify.

don't think you have anything to worry about with English being your second language, I couldn't tell the difference.

Munachi, you've transported me to another world. Your descriptions were so vivid, I could almost smell the spices in the air. Good luck.

as a travelogue but there didn't seem to be that much romance. It also wasn't all that erotic, with what sex there was being so matter-of-fact.

is what I get from this story. Your descriptions make me picture an interesting new world I would love to explore.

As for the romance, that was a little too matter of fact for me. I felt like seeing it from the outside, not from within one of the characters. I prefer the latter.

I did enjoy reading the story though.

Good luck.

Black Tulip

I like the way you write - it's so different from what is normally on offer at Lit. This story was a refreshing change. I think your not being a native English speaker added to the story, because it made the character of the girl more real to me. She was the narrator and that was just the way she was. Perfect English would have spoiled it for me.

Despite the cursory sex and the length of the story, I was quite surprised that I enjoyed this. Very well done.

I tried my best to find some bad things and I failed

I suppose the story could have been more overtly exciting, but it moves at its own pace and needs to be respected for that. Your writing is powerful and I will need to reread this soon. Thanks for sharing!

I loved this story. It seems you took me around the world in it. The characters were alive in my mind as I drank in every word. You have my admiration for a worthy piece of work.

Brian

That was a very well-done, enjoyable read. A special thumbs up for the ending.

Rumple

Enjoyed reading your story, though a little long. You gave a nice picture of the surrounding area. As far as the sex scene- short but it still worked. This was a story of the heart and you did a great job there.-Jack

Very well crafted, well done.

Imagery was superb, and I felt like I was really there. I didn't like the lead character very much though, but that only goes to show how much I appreciate the writing.

She is way too hard hearted to EVER love. stick with the slut type, because she WILL cheat

but will a meeting disperse the atmosphere, TK U MLJ LV NV

She is a totally worthless slut who spreads her legs around with daddys money. Typical white knight saviour fantasy. No real man would ever consider a promiscuous slut like Liz. She's not the type to love.