All Comments on 'Trapped Souls Ch. 05'

What a lengthy masterpiece of Halloween fiction. If it weren't for the numerous typos and spelling mistakes, it would read better and could be a real winner. The story has great potential and the author, as well, but a good editor (and spellchecker) is much needed. Still, it was an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing your work.

I have to admit, I did enjoy some of the sex scenes, but this story rambled on way too long. Continual repetitive use of inappropriate verbage was the ruination of what could have been a masterpiece.

But cannot. It needs some editing to qualify for the five. With proper editing for grammar/spelling and general punctuation, you would probably be in the running for a win with this series. The sex and story are great, but the mistakes left in kept me distrcted enough to only vote 4.

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