by Unsung Muse
and very sad.
The cruelty of humans towards one another never ceases to grate.
The tone of this story was so melancholy and wistful, my heart ached for these two women, and that poor poor girl. Good luck in the contest, and don't stop writing, your stunning prose is the true gift of this piece.
... in the contest. This was haunting and surrounding like a fine mist.
Always, E
You've brought forth bittersweet and haunting images with this story.
Good luck with the contest.
This is already a significant improvement over your Halloween Contest entry. Good luck in the contest!
Your progress as a writer is almost intimidating. Keep up the good work, Muse.
Rumple
That was incredibly poignant. Very well written. I knew you would mature, and mature quickly, as a writer. This is outstanding.
The Holidays are not all cheeriness and light. Anxiety and trepidation follow many through the season. You have done a wonderful job of capturing that emotion in a moving and touching story. Thank you
Hauntingly beautiful, sad and sweet all at once. I look forward to reading more from you. Good luck in the contest.
Stunningly rendered. A major leap forward as a writer.
too realistic to be ignored.
I read your story and I'm speechless. Absolutely marvelous work. Good luck!
Cookie :)
You hit a chord with me. Yes, because I am a lesbian, I feel like I might relate more than the average person with the message in your story.
Very well done and I mean that with total sincerity.
*hugs*
v~
I was very moved by your story, Muse. Your words were so powerful that I grew to hate the Reverend even though he's only mentioned once or twice. Very good work.
so poignant and sad. Your words do paint such pictures that can draw people in and keep them intune. Very impressive piece. Good luck in the contest.
and a sad commentary on the evil of any kind of religious fundamentalism. I have to wonder, though, because it sounded like a normal pregnancy ended in violence.
They're called bookstores, and that is where something of quality such as this belongs. Touching and erotic, it was truly an emotional rollercoaster to read. Thank you.
One of the most original and sensuous descriptions of sweet and loving cunnilingus I have ever read. As a writer of lesbian stories I am jealous.
because I didn't get the full flavour first time through. Eerily spell-binding in places, a story to savour, but one with a chill at its core and a timely reminder of the intolerance that still pollutes our world. Nice work.
Alex
Eleven straight 100s--and rightly so. Many stories are erotic; a few are truly literate--this work is both.
of:
eroticism
family love
family hate
family pathos
societal description
social comment
which makes
your world
come alive
across
countries,
continents,
oceans...
re-bookmarking all my Literotica favorites after another computer meltdown (caused by a son who refuses to use virus check on all those downloads from various share sites), I started to check out the favorites of my favorites and found this gem (and another author to add to those favorites).
A story of the hope, joy and love that comes from being with that special someone but also the pain, sorrow and regret caused by that most obnoxious of things, a sanctimonious, hypocritical asshole who claims to represent the will of god (and they wonder why church attendance in old school religion continues to drop).
It left me in tears, thankyou Muse (and you too Penny).
Sorrow and love seems to follow your tales muse.. I'm not saying that you're wrong though..There are a lot of broken wings out there.. This one though was a horror story, and it made me anger inside.. But it was very good.. Cheers Yoron.