by RoperTrace
I look forward to more submissions from you if they are of this standard.
SN
The author has a great sense of the erotic. This story builds in just enough background of just the right flavor to make a plausible read once the willing victim is in harness. From that point, it's just good sex.
Moliere
Very well written....the visuals are great...nothing better than feeling like you are there...and I wish I was...
Very hot story. Please, please introduce me to Bobby. I want the same treatment. If I wore panties, they sure would be drenched. MMMM MMMM Good job Whosonfirst.
A great, hot story with a fairytale ending. The sex and the BSDM was perfectly written. Thank you for sharing with us. Please keep writing.
It is very evident from your writing in this story, that you have a grasp on the loving side of BDSM, and how it meshes into a lifestyle. The story of how Bobby learned about punishment from his father and mother was a very erotic side story to this one. It was as if the story could be seen visually as I was reading it. Very well, and lovingly done! I loved it immensly!! You've restored my faith that there is someone out there, that understands!
Everything you have written is superb. I felt as though I was right there. I'm a female and I love your writing. You truly have a gift.
Where have you gone?? I miss your stories!! Haven't been here for a long time, but came back to look for more, and none. Please write again, I know I'm not the only one missing your talented stories.
Hope there are more chapters to follow, a well developed start. There are a few grammatical errors along with incorrect word usage, would be a plan to proof read any further submissions(no pun intended) first. I do hope you continue and thank you for this chapter.
Thank you for your comments and observations. I have used two different Lit.com editors over the years, and have proof read all my work, multiple times. It sometimes still gets missed. I just read a few of my old works in the past week, and still find grammar, spelling and usage errors. If this were my personal site, I'd correct when that happens, and re-publish. It's more difficult on here, but still doable. Thanks again.