All Comments on 'The Business Partners'

Short and sexy, the story could have been really erotic if written more smoothly. For a first story, it's very good, but we're did this talented author disappear to. Sadly we lose to many like this but I have it 5*

You were worried for nothing. This was fantastic for a first story!

Please continue writing! :O)

One minor detail: For future reference, you might want to keep your paragraphs a certain length (maybe half the size of those featured in this piece) to prevent your stories from looking too cluttered. It's easier on the audience's eyes that way.