by Edge23
Amazing story! Just a couple problems here and there but amazing job!
Very well written .. Im going to read all of his stories when i get the chance.
Heather
Heights were off and a few spots could use some editing/proofreading, but altogether an interesting story. nice work.
Could have used a touch of proofreading and their heights were a little off. But expertly written and wonderfully imaginative. And if I might...Anonymous, it's easy to scoff and downgrade and not so easy to put yourself out there and actually write something. Even harder to put it out for public consumption. So before you start knocking other work, try writing yourself and see how it feels to get knocked. I really enjoyed this story, good luck with the contest.
A slow, steady build up leading to a shattering climax. Full of details and a writing style that would not let me skip ahead no matter how much I wanted. One of the best Erotic Horror stories I have ever read. Heck, one of the best period.