by Sunnie
Actually, I guess I would give it an A- Tightly written, could move a bit faster. Nice twist including the male. Sure kept my interest.
I didn't fucking proofread this enough. The italics aren't where they should be.
Having read all 8 extant parts of this story, I wanted to compliment you on your work, and encourage you to continue with your writing. Sex aside, this is an interesting and well told story with an engaging cast of characters who the audience is brought to genuinely care about. On top of this, your writing is actually good English, which the vast majority of erotica is not. I especially liked the use of "sophomoric"; one so rarely sees it used as an adjective, and it's such a good one.
Your work is a pleasure to read, and a good fit for this site, being both erotic and very literate.
I encourage you to keep up the good work. While I am not a publisher or critic or anything "qualified," your writing seems publishable to me. Getting published isn't an easy or quick task, but have faith in yourself. You are good, regardless of what anyone else tells you.
This story is amazing...I started reading it and couldn't finish until I read all 8 parts. Please Continue to write this story!
I can't wait for the rest. Please tell me that this isn't the last chapter!
I loved all 8 chapters. If she finishes it and publishes it, I'd be the first one in line to buy her book.
Wow. This story is so intriguing, I couldn't stop reading it. Better storytelling than any other story I've ever read on here, better sex than the best romance novel. I agree with the other comments: Please finish!
well written. A few very minor typos but all in all a good read. A novel twist just before the end; to my surprise I do hope the two lovers can put their lives back together.
please don't tell me that's the last chapter?! I'd love to see what happens with Sidney, and Ben and Grace's relationship.
I couldn't stop reading until I finished all 8 chapters!
This is the best thing I've read on here by far!
100/10 :D
Congratulations on such an amaazing story!
I Loved It! You Have To Write The Next Chapter, Don't Leave Us Hanging! We Need To know What Happens.
oh my god this story is awesome. five stars. more of this please!
Oh my god! Love this story i really hope you will continue this soon xoxo