All Comments on 'Santa Was A Lady!'

Something happened while you were writing this story that I think you should look into. Many of the sentences got broken in the oddest places...almost like you had pressed the return key as you were writing. This would be easy to fix, then you could resubmit the story as Santa Was a Lady!- Edited. At the same time, you could fix some of the run on sentences, odd word missing here and there, and make the paragraphs more equal in length. Your ideas are novel and vivid, and could be all the more effective, with some structural changes. Please don't think I am attacking your story, I loved A Christmas For Carol and will be putting it in my Favorites section soon. You obviously have ideas to burn, here the presentation takes away from the impact of the story...and that's a shame.

I appologize for how this looks and as soon as I get back in today I promise to find out how to edit it. So sorry to the readers.

AOL said you weren't a "known member". I THINK (never actually tried it), you could cut and paste your original story into the white submission box on the submit a story page. (use edit on the toolbar). Bring up your story as it stands now and press copy. Then, bring your cursor to the white space for your story on the submissions page and press paste. At that point, you could make any changes and resubmit the story as Santa Was a Lady...Edited. Good luck, and let me know if this process works!

Did you sleep through grammar class? This story reads like a great big run on sentence.

You big old grinch Shut up. :) and please don't choke on the turkey while complaining about the bird.

C-YA!

Angel

I am still laughing! very comical

Keep writing maybe one day they will get to where you are. And I did sleep through grammar class

I loved your approach... you really told the story.

Brilliant job!! ;-)

Nice idea BUT u desperately need to brush up on ur writing skills. Sorry to put it this way. All the best

Well I liked it.....Seasons greetings