All Comments on 'Run Ch. 06'

A very sweet story with very good characters.

And the sex is really hot.

Well done.

I am loving this story more and more as it goes on. You've done a great job of fleshing out the characters, and the sex scenes are great. This is quickly catching up to Lost in Texas as my favorite story on Literotica.

You're covering it from all angles: an exciting story and hot sex.

Boyd

"Your narrow-mindedness makes ME uncomfortable," said Mary Baker.

Oh my GOD, that has to be one of the most perfectly delivered lines ever!!!!

Not my favorite chapter. <br><br>

Things I definitely like: Your matter-of-fact approach to sexuality, be it straight, gay, lesbian, or bi. <br>

The scene where the Braziers are put in their place and the witch hunt is put to rest.

<br>Keith and Pat's romance.<br><br>

Things that didn't work so well for me:

<br>Reality intruded when you wrote, <i>there isn't a school in the district than doesn't hire EX-convicts for something or another</i><br><br>

Actually, school districts are required to run background checks and have every job applicant finger printed. It's highly unlikely they would accidentally hire an ex-con, and even more unlikely to do so on purpose. The liability is just too huge a risk for one thing, and for another, parents would be up in arms and yanking their kids out of school left and right. But that's a minor point in the story so no big deal.<br>

<br>Todd's gay sex experience seemed to come out of nowhere. Did I completely miss the signs? I was expecting Gail to make a pass as soon as Sally revealed she was lesbian. I'm a little surprised at the turbo pace at which they went for it, but then again, it's Literotica so what the hell.

<br><br>But I was most disappointed in Pat and Keith's first time. It felt totally unrealistic taking into account her upbringing, the fact it was her first time, etc. Seemed wayyy to advanced a sexual mindset for her. It was a hot scene, but for me, it didn't fit the characterization you've given to Pat up til now.

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Love the way you treat all orientations equally. Ignore the bigots! On a different note, I loved Pat's line, "Don't interrupt me mid-threat. It makes me edgy" before she stuffed the banana in the bimbo.