All Comments on 'Making Tim Happy: Expanded'

This is the first of your stories I have read and I enjoyed it very much. It has an excellent twist that I didn't see coming until the end.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

This is much better than the original. The characters come to life. The extra development in this version means the story now makes sense. I hope you inspire other authors to take the time to edit and think.

Very well written. enjoyed it immensely. Missed your first version but happy to read this one. Do a sequel and maybe bring Paula into it.

Priapus

Interesting story [That means it's a little different from normal]

I enjoyed the story and I could picture Claire. Mama Mia!

David and Claire now should start making the baby that she wanted in the first place.....

You did a nice job of combining in one person (Tim) two seemingly contradictory, but somehow connected aspects of the male psyche: that woman ("slut") hating, jealous, angry side (that we see WAY too much of in the Loving Wife comments) and that voyeuristic, wife-sharing side ("wimp" to the haters, and I'd have to agree with the haters to the extent that we also see way too many unimaginative wimp portrayals).

A really good read. I liked your description of the mutual masturbation scene. The shaving scene was also very hot. Thanks

VERY well done! The pacing was great! The charictors beliveable. The plot was hot! Mostly the surprise ending made everything cum togeather so well! I never read the origional but if this is what editing does for your stories, keep editing! Also this is the first of your stories I've read but am eager to read more!!

Very nice . I enjoyed it immensely.