All Comments on 'Lollipop Under The Christmas Tree'

Story is good but it needs review by Spell Check.

I like your ideas, I think it would be helpful to think a little bit more about the presentation of this story. Spelling isn't a big deal necessarily, but you want to make your work as professional appearing as possible. Good luck!

"Lewis," Lollipop groaned out. "I have a cherry that needs popping, can you help?"

One of the all time great lines in porn literature. :)

Thanks, Hannibal, and good luck in the contest.

Rumple

add to it- they start a relationship, he helps her with school, she gradulates...