All Comments on 'Laresa's World Ch. 20: William'

As good as all the others in the series have been.

I may have thought of the idea, but each writer has contributed so much more than I ever would have dreamed. This chapter is outstanding, just like the others have been. The work that you and deathlynx are doing with the society is very imaginitive and I am so glad to have given that task to two individuals with such great talent. Thanks so much for continuing your tales of Laresa with the same flair you started with. ~ Red

but didn't have a chance to comment. Your talent grows with each story you write. This was so well done that it held me enthralled from the first word to the very last. I was actually disappointed that there wasn't three more pages to read. Laresa has brought out a very good side of your writing. You should be proud of this.

The Society bit and the piracy theme combined with the fondness between the rogue and the genie were something else. I truly enjoyed this mix of fantasy, history, comedy, and swashbuckling action. I give it a 5.

Well done (as always)

BUT.... needs a run-through again. On page 2, at least, you got the masters' names switched around.

Yep, I crossed up Aaron and Will a couple of times. I'll put that on the list of corrections I need to make. Thanks for the catch, and the compliment.