All Comments on 'Jake's Sisters Ch. 05.1'

this series is amazing, please write more on this one. i've been waiting for the next chapter of this since you finished the last one. they are simply awesome. KEEP WRITING!!!

Kane, your work is great. Keep writing, and keep up with this story. It's great. Like the other poster, I keep waiting for the next installment.

You're doing great with this series, and i hope you keep it up.

This Series is Awesome. I waited too long for installment 5, but it was worth the wait. This story is absolutely hot. Please don't stop writing it just yet. I'd love to see where it is going. And judgeing by Sarah's train of thought, it's got lots of places to go. I do want to see you pursue your other story ideas, but I see real potential in this story and it would be an artistic crime to let it go unfinished.

You have got to keep this one going. It's too hot to let it go and there needs to be a logical conclusion, say about 5 or 6 chapters down the road.

If your hearts really not into it let it go and move onto writing something else. You write very well, but the story started to take a turn on chapter four, which makes me think that's when you became bored. If you finish the story have him stick with his sisters and let the schoolgirls go.

PLEASE DON'T STOP THE STORY NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Love the stories and this storyline in particular. Bravo!

You have a great story going and have set it up for more so PLEASE KEEP IT CUMMING.

jail isn't fun, why would you want him to tell about his sisters.and his mom a LAWYER.

Just the greatest series, all that clean good humoured fun. And later on I just know he'll get mother! Not only descriptive but erotic as hell.

Hey don't stop now i want more

I agree with the other comment in that it was great up until he told someone outside the family. It was better when it was just Jake and his sisters.

Keep the adventures CUMING!!! My dick didn't make it through the first story. And each story was better!!!!! Please DON'T STOP!!!!!

One of the best series out there

Dont you even think about stopping this story, if you do there will be a lot of disappointed readers out there and i would be one of them. Great plot, Keep up this story if you stop then you will die,LOL

I also think it was VERY HOT, little light on plot, but it was a .1 so i think it was more a little somthing 2 tide us over. but i agree with another poster telling his friend now matter how good was most likely a

drop it now, it's too far along. Great story so far. When will you bring his mom into the act?

I know musicankane you have other stories you want to write. Write them, just don't forget about Jake and his sisters. I don't mind a few months inbetween stories. This is one of the best stories hands down i've read.

Great, Really Great...makes me sad i never had any sisters

i just read ch. 01-05.1 and i couldn't stop till i finished and now i need more...

But your not in to it and you can tell by reading this one. Chapter 5.1 is nowhere as good as the others. Chapters 1 to 4 where great, funny, sexy, and creative. If I wanted to read crap, I would not be reading your storys but this one is crap. I hope you take the time to make a really chapter 5 but if you don't care about the story then I would say don't.

another excellently erotic chapter. This story is way to good to stop now. You say your a virgin, but you certainly dont write like it. I like the addition of Michelle's friends and Chris, but I think you need to keep up the relationship between Jake and Michelle too. Please continue to write about Jake and his sisters. You've set it up for so many more possible encounters. It makes me wet just thinking about it. I will anxiously await the next chapter.

like the other person said u stop u DIE. it took me about 5 hours to read these i couldnt get through any of the chapters without having to. this story kicks ass but i think unlike other ppl u need to bring some more ppl from outside in but not to many keep it between him and michelle and the sisters. THIS STORY ROX MY SOX

Each chapter is great, looking forward to more of them.

well what can i say, the wait was worth it. But u gotta keep goin, i love the story so far an can't wait to read more. Ignor the ppl who bad mouth u, u work is good as far as i'm concerned. Roll on the full version of chapter 5. But don't bring mom into it please, it's great with jake, his sisters his mate an the cheerleaders theres so much room for u to do what u want with the story u don't need anyone else.

this series is the greatest series i've ever read on literotica...if u stop now ur a moron, i don't care what other stories u have going, make this series the mother of all stories dude...speaking of mothers, haha, can't wait to read about her and jake some time soon...BUT DON'T STOP WRITING THIS STORY!!!!

Dude this rocks, though just some things to make it better. One spread the plot out, this one went thru alittle heavy on the gas. Second, do some post work, reread your stories and try to fix all the spelling, grammer, and what not. Besides that, damn man can't wait for more.

LaterX

Nice story but story need progression. You already have included the sisters and friends, so only the mother left to seduce (if need to). I have enjoyed the story but not much more left to happen keeping story progression. Nice work but i agree the story will be better finish there (or soon). Please don t fall on the repetitive fuck sequence. Love and values support stories, not repetitive fucking. You ve done great job here

I've been reading this series all the way through and it's got me outside my mind. Please just one moe, I'll do anything!

man after that you have to continue, this one man.

Excellent story! Continue this series, but lose the extra guy.

Man your story series "Jake's Sister" was the best shit I have read in a long time, please continue to Wright, I am begging you! Good job creating Sarah; she makes things hot with her witty comments, she is such a tease. Two thumbs up to you and I must say I love how you included some dream theater (John Petrucci) stuff in your story. Thanks for the good story, don’t stop Wright, your story is too dam good to stop.

Thanks man, take care

Cheers

Cant wait to read more.

the series is very hot!!i wish i had sisters like that.but then i wouldn't want to have a friend to share them with.lose the other guy.

The story never really was all that subtle, but that didnt matter because the sex was constant, extremely hot and ezplicit, which I think is the way most fans of incest like it! :p

Keep the story cumming, please, until you can at least end it in a huge orgy with the mother also involved :D. It will add closure to the tale. As a fellow author though, I can understand that you can get sick of writing a certain series after a while - but please, continue with this work til you can end it properly, for the fans if not for yourslf. Cheers

Keep writing this great series. I've loved every chapter and I hope to see alot more. I can understand when you kinda lose interest in a story, cuz I've done that ALOT before, but you gotta try to continue this series. It is so well written and we all are looking forward to more. I suggest you bring the mom into it and have them make the porn site and then have the happy ending. That'd be a great ending and I would definitely be very satisfied. Good luck and thanks.

I've read the entire series, and have been waiting for another installment. You didn't let me down. This is one of the best stories I've read on this site, and I'm not lying either.

Please continue.

Please keep this coming

You write well, you are turning on the world, but go ahead and change your story line. It does seem as if you are exactly where you said, losing motivation on this one.

The premise of your story is very good and you have a definite gift. The idea you planted for the next chapters sounds awesome. I do hope you will continue this story.

this was a awesome chapter, in a long line of brilliant stories. i have been following Jake's Sisters obsessively, and will be distraught if you dont continue it.

you managed to pull off the group sex scene rather well. they can be hard to write. but you kept it following.

i really hope that you can find the motivation to continue this story, because i think that it would be really good. they possibilty of them being porn stars is something. they could be famous among their class mates. and everyone would want to screw Jake then. maybe even Chris as well.

Please continue. The story is excellent.

Please don't stop writing these. I am very intrested to see what you have coming up. It would be very upsetting to stop the Jake's Sisters Series. I know you must have millions of ideas running through your head about diffrent stories but please try to manage. Thank You For Your TIme.

This is one of my favorite storylines on this site. I have it bookmarked so that I can see new additions. I hope you keep it going.

this story is the best ive read in a long time. please don't stop. this story rivals vertigoJ's stuff. its just as good if not better

Awesome, awesome, awesome, and, ohhh what was that other word... oh, yeah, AWESOME!!! PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY ARCH, I WOULD LOVE TO READ MORE.

Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.

You have GOT to keep this story going! It is, quite possibly, one of the hottest stories that I've read on this site, and your stories are my current favorites, all around. Please keep up these stories about Jake and his family!

Please keep this story going...it just gets better and better!

can u keep chris out of the picture so jake could have his own harem....plssss....yeah..!!!keep this story going...

and pls keep it going for a long long time...ummm maybe atleast to CHAPTER 20 or more

Keep writing please this story is awesome.

Even though the story is highly rated, this 5.1 chapter is weak, the author mentioned the lack of motivation and it shows, starting chapter four, all characters are on the verge of losing their personality, the build up is ineffective. It's fine is you like a big orgy, but there is a thousand other mediocre stories on the site that have that. This doesn't do justice to the previous hardwork.

... Smoking, wow that was a sizzling story, please continue!!

Just got to wonder though, is Lindsey's pills working enough to stop from her getting knocked up?

i hav to be honest this is the first time iv felt any need to write a comment and that is because this is the best collection iv ever seen on literotica, please don't stop now

Great Story. The storeline is developing real well. The sisters are so hot and the idea of starting a porn site is great. I hope you continue this series.

Fantastic story. More chapters will be greatly appreciated.

No plot, just improbable sex scenes recycled from several hundred other Lit stories. Ungrammatical, poor spelling. I hope you can do better.

Betty

Great overall story, you can tell the hint of influence from VertigoJ's Party of Five, but i wonder why nobody caught the Six Times a Day influence from SpacerX as well ^_^

It's a good thing that you labelled this chapter 5.01 as compared to the other chapters this one didn't have much character development.

This story has the premise, the cast list and the locations to make it brilliant. don't waste it.

Overall this isn't a bad attempt, a lot lighter on the plot than I normally like but not too bad. I do have to say that the addition of Chris isn't something I'm wild about. Unlike Jake he doesn't have the angle of being related to the girls and honestly he's just in the way. I'd rather see Sarah go completely for her brother and shoot down guys like Chris rather than just give it up at the drop of a hat.

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Love the story, but I am wondering, when is Sandy going to take a ride on Jakes tool?

I absolutely love this whole series and hope you continue with it.

Great story series, hope you continue!

I didn't want my rating to discourage you so I left it at 75 though I'd rate it at 25.

Not to sound too critical, but from this point, the story has just gone to hell. The addition of Chris is a nice little supplement since it brings some comic relief but it's not really a necessity.

Then the entire pool party gang bang, while a natural male fantasy, just takes away the fun since it turns all the girls into generic sex toys instead of giving them variety, you know.

Again I think to sum up what I thought was wrong here: "Too much of a good thing can be a bad thing."

But anyhow, it'd be fascinating to see where this story leads and how it's gonna end.

Don't leave your numerous fans hanging. It's a crime!

Can we? Please?

You are a genius.

Can't remember password, sorry.

This tale was to good to stop reading,I just wish I could have read the first four chapters

The last bit of Chris and gang bang too much male fantasy. and please don't bring in Mom. Up to then a good story.

Man keep it up, couldn't wait for this instalment, it was worth the wait, loved it. Keep'em cumming please

it was a good story until he open his stupid mouth and told of the incest that jail time dumbass.why would the writer put them in harm way with a inmature jerk.it blow it for me.

...WAS a great story...from chapter 1-4. But this one has one certain problem: the characters that were created at the beginning of chapter 1 were great. The sisters weren't all the same, Sarah who was always fighting her brother, Lindsay caring bout him...everybody was a special character. In this chapter, all the girls are just meat. In addition, why would he tell his friend that he fucks his siters, and why would they let him have sex with them. You pointed out in the first chapters that they wanted their brother because of his dick. They aren't sex slaves normally. So I don't understand why they would give themselves to Chris.

I would love to read a real chapter 5...but not one that continues after chapter 5.1 - one that REPLACES 5.1, because this one is just dumb fucking, which is sad because this story has been so great so for.

I love this series, plz keep it going, sarah sounds so fucking hot, I wish she was real.

This was an excelent storie and I gotta know what happens next.

When can we get the next part. I really want to read it

I don't care if your motivation is negative. you have to continue. This is by far the best series I have read yet. In fact I'm pissed that there is't already more.

this story was the shit pleaz continue with the family business and i think including mom would be a bad idea

this was by far the best story i have ever read. if you dont make more i think i would just die

Ignore the negative comments, this is a very good story and I would erealy love to see more.

I love where this is heading, definately a "5", shoot, it's a "10"!

How come this doesn't connect with the past chapters?

dumbest of the dumb,it killed the story for me.you had a great story until you lost your common sense.i hate it when writers either want to be cockold or share their women.

Why do you cuckolds have to destroy every story there is???

It was a good story up to that point. And please try to keep it realistic. No way a guy would invite on of his "player" friends to nail his sisters. He would most likely end up beating him half to death.

Well you were doing good til you went and had him tell his best friend about him screwing his sisters..no one in their right mind would do something that stupid. i was really getting into chapter 5 until i read that...wont even bother to read the other chapters...they were great up to now.

I'd kill my best friend, slowly and painfully, if they ever tried to invade my union with my sisters. NO FRIENDS, ONLY THE BROTHER AND SISTERS.

I think the story is still really good. However I agree that the friend should not have been involved in the pool orgy. I disagree that the story is ruined and I will continue to read the story. It is one of the better stories by far and I hope it is finished. Of seems all the really good stories I read aren't finished and I'm left hanging. Also I will read your other stories that catch my attention. My only suggestion is to make the chapters a couple pages longer. I personally like stories with chapters that are longer than on or two pages.

dont include friend....this is called jake's sisters not jake's sisters with his friend.....but he should have a 3 way with sis or 5 way with girlfriend and sis....think about it and dont stop writing.....add mom in it? weird?

Great, you managed to completely ruin the story. As pointed out by others, the story was called Jake's sisters and not Jake with and without sisters and friends. I liked your previous chapters, but this part was bad. No one in their right mind would introduce their sisters to "friends" like that. A solid punch and some kicks in the right direction would be the right approach just for the suggestion. This part got so weird, corny and completely ridiculous as not to say unrealistic that I'm out of words. I consider giving up literotica to avoid more storys like this. I think I've had enough...

Jake is hopeless, just kill his ass off.

are you fucking kidding me!? why the fuck couldn't your character Jake keep his mouth shut even if it was just his best friend? he just had to fucking blab like a girl the first chance he got, didn't he?

and why the fuck did you have to bring Chris in here, there's no fucking use for him as a character in this story? and the poolside orgy, what gives??

this chapter was a total fucking disappointment. totally retarded logic to the whole thing that I couldn't make sense of.

Chris joining and girls from the highschool, WHAT THE FUCK

Dude! Did you just get completely retarded in your head writing this chapter or what? I can't see your rationale behind Jake telling Chris about fucking his sisters, and then AGREEING to bring him in on the festivities. Who the fuck in their right mind, with even a minute grain of common sense in their brains, would tell someone about sleeping with his sisters, even if they were his BFF!

Its like it wasn't even you who wrote this chapter. And why the fuck do you writers have to always bring in another guy into the mix? Do you pathetic fuckers like the idea of someone else fucking your women in front of you!?

in itself it was a decent story. It actually seemed fairly logical in some ways. Since it all started with the sisters being enamured by his equipment, not a loving connection to him, the idea that it would spread aeound the way it did is not far fetched. The sudden intro and telling of the friend tho seemed a bit off.

a fucking box of hamsters (or a LDS family reunion) except the Mormons have access to spell and grammar check. who are the idiots who give this dreck 5 stars?

(Facepalm)

1. Tell my friend? No.

2. Tell my friend he can fuck my sister. NO!

3. Tell my friend he can fuck my sister that Im already fucking? HELL NO!!

4. Pool party? No.

5. Girl thinks it feels good when you bang her cervix? Fuck NO!

...oh, and lovedhow all cheerleaders must lick carpet, rofl!

...I see a 5.2 story, hopefully there is some redemption, lol.

hmmm

Um... so... where's the black guy with a 19 inch dick? You have so many girls to SHARE, so please, bring in a whole football squad.

Seriously, one more ruined story...

I loved the previous chapters, particularly the development and tension building of the first story. I also liked how you added some realism to previous chapters by making Jake seem guilty and apprehensive about what he's feeling and later, doing.

But this chapter? Not so much. It reads like a cheesy porno movies that turns the sisters into mindless fuck dolls, and I don't really agree with the idea of brining outsiders into the story, especially telling them so openly about the family's incestuous endeavors. I'd like to see more focus on keeping it within the family. This chapter would have worked better if it were portrayed as a wet dream of Jake's, or perhaps a fantasy he has in his head while home alone, or even as a separate standalone story. It just feels too disconnected from the previous chapters. Still though, not the worst I've ever read.

Was a good story til this chapter. How does he go from being apprehensive virgin to sharing his sisters. Just lost me with that one now I dont even want to continue with the story

Yeah sharing not cool should not have added another guy

nice job of amplifying the sex level with this pool party.

I'm ok with Jake bringing in his wingman, Chris.

I skipped through the rest of the story after drizzle stick blabbed to his gay friend.