by Bob Peale
Lickideesplit is right, it is miscategorized, but it should be Humor & Satire!
But you need to finish it with the nasty divorce, pregnancy , STD's upset children, parents disowning her, husband suing the store and marrying the georgious divorce lawyer and living happily ever after. I don't care to know about her at all. she is worthless... Ben needs to be the winner.
Nice to read a story, instead of a wam bam.
Look forward to reading more of your work.
I love the story. The sex seen was awesome. Big smile. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Folks, it's fiction. :)
than the average smut found here.
Its nice to see plot and dialogue
well done
The payoff is not a thousand dollars in gift certificates, but a huge laysuit worth millions.
Wonderful fantasy. I appreciate the middle aged people having middle aged bodies rather than middle aged people with 18 year old bodies. Refreshing change.
Nice job.
Suspend your grip on reality all you nay-sayers. It's a good read.
Great Job. It's good to see a fantastic Loving Wives story. Please keep sending them.
I thought the story was good. It turned me on. I think that is the point though I am not an expert. It isn't supposed to be realistic, is it?
Interesting premise, that this story is really a NC story - I honestly hadn't thought of it that way, but several of the comments have been to that effect.
Thanks everyone who has taken the time to leave comments or feedback.
Inventive - well written - non-consent worthy material - made loving husband look like a foolish author could - "show Him How???" - You were fine until that point of non-consent turned into clear / blind but purposeful blatent cockolding - served no purpose to the stories acceptance or value. Couldn't resist it eh. Change in theme caused low score and lose of plausibility.
unique, very "out there", but my latest story is as "out there", so I can't complain. Good luck!
I've read some silly stories, but this one takes the cake!
and just wanted to note, of course this wouldn't work in real life. that's why it's called a FANTASY.
Very inventive. Few stories here, even the stimulating ones, offer surprises. This one did.
thanks!
very good story, tom/tim should be fixed and maybe the story should be moved to nc section, but hot, nontheless.
would like to see a sequel to this, which would be loving wife section with her going back voluntarily
This would never work in real life. The lawsuit this lady could bring against this store, would be worth millions! This was simply rape! Victims of rape sometimes have orgasms, because it's a bodily function. Still it's rape! One thousand dollars in gift certicates is not even close to closing this episode of stupidity.
I didn't expect that turn of events. I may find myself watching security closer next time. You may want to have this edited...Tom turned to Tim towards the end. Good luck!