All Comments on 'Gentlemen's Party Patriarch Palace Ch. 01'

The main characters Mark and Uncle Max hold the promise of making this one of the hottest stories in quite some time. Introducing Allison along with many other girls, all naked, should generate insane interest in this fascination story.

Enjoyable Read! Looking forward to the next chapter.

As a fan of CMNF stories I like this one as well. I hope the next chapter will be published soon.

Off to a good start, I'm looking forward to the next part of the series.

i love this story please continue

You are off to an excellent start. Your writing style is good, and the plot line is quite promising. Please do continue as soon as possible. I eagerly await the further adventures of the young men and their as yet unwary but petulant school mate.

When in the world are you going to finish this story. You have such a great start and premise going, but you're leaving us all hanging.r

Thanks for your kind comments and the high ratings. I note that you are anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Actually I have written the next two chapters, but when I submitted chapter two it was rejected. I couldn't discover why and those in charge of the site wouldn't say. I could find no breach of the rules in the story so I asked an editor; he couldn't find one either. I don't have time to play such guessing games so I now publish them on my site which you will find the address of in my bio. Admittedly they are hotter than chapter one which is why they are being described as "too hot for the Literotica site".

Matt.

Nice start! I've read chapters 2 and 3 elsewhere. Was chapter 4 ever written?

I would like to read more. Well-written and I don't remember any typos. I like that. Thanks for the submission

I would really have hoped for more description and variety of sentence structures -- without it, your story really drags. This also alters the feel of your dialogue, leaving it somewhat lacking in the characterization department. (Plus, your uncle Max character seemed to do little more than fill in exposition that might have been styled better). Lack of description may be a matter of personal taste, but I know that I like my erotica with enough visuals that I actually see what I'm reading. I just didn't get that from this piece.

Sorry to be a bit negative (heck, I don't even know how long ago this was written, so you might not even care), but with a little fixing, I think you could have a much more attractive product here. (But what do I know?)

There has never - to my knowledge - been a sequel to this story! Just when we were all heated up and attentive! :-)

This stuff is great. We want to hear more of these and shut out all the cfnm crap, which makes us puke. Also we want these parties to be happening for real!!

I met my wife at one of those parties 7 years ago.she was walking around naked serving drinks when I met her.she was on of six girls that night all naked,and all the girls were fondled and enjoyed by the guests.my wife still does the parties and some I get to attend myself.she has to either shave completly or just a touch of public hair,but her pussy lips etc must be clearly visible for all guest to see.some parties unfortunately not ones where I get to attend she is paid more so guests can take her to a room and have sex too.

I would love to see more chapters.