All Comments on 'Evelyn's Nude Awakening'

Very nice story... Now where was that beach house?

It was a great story, and a fantasy that all young men should have. A great read!

A love story that should be the example for all these fantasy stories on Literotica.

The plot is very good but marred irrevocably by an overuse (abuse?) of flowery metaphors, adjectives and adverbs (and a few typos). A 'naked body' doesn't need 'completely' - it is or it isn't.

Even Barbara Cartland wouldn't have got into 'attentive clitorises' and having chagrin 'floundering on a rocky shore'. If you are going to write good romance, you need a tough editor.

Leaving aside 'surreal lucidity' - whatever that means - isn't it an oxymoron? - I really struggled with 'the attraction to him seemed to draw her through her womb'.

I'm trying to be positive. You are so much better than the "turn the handle, crank out another page" type of romance writers that fill this site with second rate 'crowd-pleasers'.

Take romance seriously and you will be wonderful. Good luck.

that you undertook the effort - it was entertainingly erotic and sensual - and comfortably respectful to each character and the reader.

You are growing and it is appreciated.

Thanks with Regard

That was one sweet love story. Maybe a bit too flowery for my taste, but definitely romance.

Good luck.

Black Tulip

I have planned a walk around the coast for a while now. You may just have spurred me in to doing it! I don't know who that editor guy is, I liked "drawing through my womb". It is a really touching story, and has a great tone.

keep it up. It brings back memories of my own past! thanks!

What a loving and kind story. I loved it. Your descriptions of her and his intimate parts was just great. So many authors get quite vulgar in this regard. Thanks for your gentle and kind descriptions of those parts and their emotions. My favorite stories are centered in nudity. Yours is the best that I have read. Please continue to lead the way in your way of storytelling.

well told with romance and passion and the sex is not in your face. bit of a bummer though when she got tupped on their first shag - new a girl once who got pregnant on her first fuck in the back of a car - not by me - she knew instantly she was tupped when she got out later.

Sweet, affectionate, and happily steamy. I can't wait for the next chapter!

You walked the line that defines erotic and didn't stray. An excellent tale that has everybody searching maps to find that beach house. As one comment noted - some of the descriptives got flowery and this is the area to tweak - reread them critically.

Otherwise an enthralling tale.