All Comments on 'Christmas at the Bowling Alley'

The tasks were a fun touch, although some of the descriptions were too cheesy, especially the masturbation scene. Also not sure how this is a winter holiday story in any way other than how it just happens to occur around Christmas time. The story could just as easily take place any other time of the year.

and you deserve kudos for originality. I do agree that this is not overly related to a particular winter holiday. Good luck!!

Really liked it. The switching between the real world & her thoughts as she worked through her 'tasks' made this a very enjoyable read. Nice work!

Now now....

Per the rules:

"- Story must have a winter holiday theme. Please don't just submit a normal story and throw in snowflakes and gingerbread. That would not be in the spirit of the contest, and readers & voters would probably punish you for your trickiness."

HEHEHE

Always, Lizzy

Nicely done... good luck with the contest!

that bowling was anything to be excited about...perhaps I was wrong.

Great job!

v~

I'm signing up for a bowling league, now, in hopes of meeting him! <grin> Almost felt this needed to be in the BDSM category, but it may be a little too light for it... on second thought, it's probably in the right place... Good luck in the contest!

about this story not being particularly Winterly.

But I don't care very much because it was hot enough to melt snow. LOL

Good luck.

Black Tulip

It was a very erotic story and I liked hearing her thoughts as she performed her tasks. BDSM, mature, it was a great mix :)

Good luck and Happy Holidays,

Ali