All Comments on 'Alight Upon the Sky'

An odd mix between harsh reality (the bear attack) and the supernatural element. Somehow the sex just didn't seem right in this setting,,,it somehow sullies the pristine nature of the Aurora. Not my cup of tea at all, but best of luck!

I was almost done reading for the night when I said "One More!"

I am glad I did this was intense, creative and thought out!

Thanks for the journey~

Good Luck and Happy Holidays~

In my opinion, this story is so wonderful that it is close to being holy. "Supernatural element?" No. It's just another universe. Tens of millenia ago we betrayed our friends the elves, and they evacuated into another universe. Everyone knows that.

Only two comments. The mystical pattern for situations like this is TWO people. The other elves should not have been present. And when she was Roaring in Glory, (we say orgasming?) Aurora was shouting GIBBERISH?!

*NO!!* It was their language. Quenya. Okay, so let's say the pathetic uncultured human doesn't know Quenya. He should at least have said

"a language I couldn't understand," or something. He should have been respectful. But to call it GIBBERISH?! Craig is lucky I cannot instantly behead him for daring to call it that. On second thought, I could have beheaded him, he is only a fictional character

He would not even have had time to scream.

This was an amazing story! The best I've read yet.

I do have to agree though, callign it 'gibberish' was harsh. A musical sounding language shouldnt have been gibberish. It literally made me wince.

But otherwise the story is FANTASTIC. Despite having my own story int he competition I am now hoping you win.

Emerald

It was hard for me to juxtapose the sex and the story of the man finding himself, but both are very well written. That's probably why I don't write much plot! He he! I enjoyed this immensely! Thanks so much

Such a wonderfully well written and crafted story. I loved it! A beautiful christmassy story,coupled with some amazingly hot sex. perfect!