All Comments on 'A Walk to The Paradise Garden'

Beautiful and melodic! A perfect ending to a journey taken together.

Boyd

like a flower attracts the bee. Knew where it was going and knew it was their final walk, but I had to keep reading. Your words were as attractive as the scent and color that lures the bee in to the flower. When all is said and done, they went to their reward together and that ain't bad, although I might have done it diferently if I was going to depart this vale of tears with my mate. You are an artist in your ability to spin a tale. Thank You. Ronnie W.

I just lost the love of my life to emphasema on the 28th of Nov. He was 79 and I am only 60 and it is not yet my time to go and I am left behind to grieve. It would have been so much nicer if both of us had died together like this couple but he would not have gone for it..he would have said I was still young and beautiful and that I needed to love again and yet how can anyone who has shared the love we had, ever want another. But go on I must for suicide is not the answer. Reading stories of another couples love helps though so thanks -- this one was tremendous.

Moving and poignant. Thanks

And very poignent. I can't believe you wrote this in such little time Sack. It's fantastic.

Sack, you leave me speechless this is a beautiful story. True love and the need to be forever together..in all eternity.

I am also speechless that you dedicate this to me...It's such an honor to be thought of in such a special way by such a talented and wonderful person...

Thank you for always sharing your gift with us...

~Honey

I'm not ashamed to say I finished this with tears in my eyes. Beautiful, and moving. Well done.

Alex

Wonderful piece of writing Sack, it made me think of my father, and step-mother who both passed away last year within months of each other. Thankyou.

Brian

writing this with teary rivers flowing down my face? Damn, Sack! You captured this visceral moment for all time. Good job.

The only issue I would have is the incongruousness of your choice of words. On the one hand it is melodic and tempered, yet on the other there are cliches and (IMO) unnecessary slang. I would edit it to flow a bit better, especially the first paragraph, and tone down the falling part to be less graphic. All and all, this is really close to excellent and is absolutely worth a few more minutes!!!

QP

feel and ideas in the words..here...a little snag..did you mean infirmity it makes sense to me then with that word..you have some great descriptive lines that give the color and visual projections...nice...blue

Your depth amazes me my friend. Sorry i was so remiss with my reading and voting. Good luck!

Cookie:)

...and absolutely wonderful setting you designed, my friend. I might have chosen a less painful way for them to cross over, but your story, your words. Very nice.

I'm crying like a fucking baby right now. I feel like I've been kicked hard in the gut, I was moved so much by your story. They chose to die together instead of waiting for cancer, the bane of so many lives (I should know from watching many people that I care about getting clobbered by it) tear them apart. Bravo, Sack! Best of luck to you!

Sentimental and loving, but not maudlin. Congratulations on a job well-done.

Rumple

A sweet story by a sweet man. I'm glad they got to choose their departure date, and checked out together.

I did as you advised sack and checked out your work, this tale brought tears to my eyes, thank you

Peter

An absolute joy to read. This reminds me of some of Henry Miller's kaleidoscopic prose. I look forward to more of this sort of thing from you.

A very sweet love story. The imagery is vivid and the characters sympathetic. A story with a very poignant message, if a bit polarizing...Excellent tale, Sack!