All Comments on 'Winter'

by wildsweetone

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LeBrozLeBrozover 18 years ago
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A poetic quickie....

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Powerful imagery!

I really like the way this (short) poem provokes images. Those few short words brings back memories of winters past.

DJ

Bill DadaBill Dadaover 18 years ago
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I like it like it is, very nice.

WickedEveWickedEveover 18 years ago
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I'm hardly qualified to comment on a haiku. It's been ages since I wrote one, and I still need to learn more about them.

I like the poem. I wouldn't use "the" twice in a haiku. "the cat sleeps" doesn't have quite enough impact.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
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I really like haiku poetry, and I think this is what you're aiming for here. It didn't pull me in like I expected it to. I would love to see you expand a little. Maybe do the 5, 7, 5 counts. I believe it would work out better, and you could add more details by doing so.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Very nice

A very nice haiku, WSO. The images are clear and free of editorial. I'm no expert on this form, but something you may want to think about: in haiku each word comes at a premium. In this poem you tell us the season 3 times (the title, the first word, and the snow). You might put the space of two of them to better use.

Good work.

Fly

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailover 18 years ago
winter

finally showed its strength this week. A good poem for the right weather. I like Haiku, saying so much with so little. Powerful poetry.

TheRainManTheRainManover 18 years ago
It's...

beginning to click in, isn't it.

Again, as with your free verse writing, it happens fast -- the little understandings begin to appear.

Do your own thing - 'haiku-wise' - is my suggestion. Read the right people.

Anonymous
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