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albeit in a more realist way. Yeats dreamed of casting off his body and becoming a sterile--and so unimpeachable--work of classical art in that poem; you are very much alive in this one loving and hating your worldly self.

I gotta say I want to edit it because it is overwhelming--and that's good. It has a lot of passion but I still think somewhat less would be more. And don't get me wrong--I wouldn't recommend changing it if I didn't think it was so strong to begin with. It's full of diamonds. :)