All Comments on 'Not the Pain'

Welcome. It's always nice to see new writers who have a fresh voice.

There are shopworn and cliched moments in this poem, I think -- but if that is all there were, I would not be commenting. I also find sections and phrases that show you have a fresh way of stating things.

I also find structural problems with the poem that do not need to be mentioned to a new writer here, since many do not react well and take them as criticism instead of suggestion.

Keep writing and posting, please. If you do and show you are open to contructive criticism, I'd be glad to give you my thoughts in those other areas.

No vote left. I never vote because I find it purposeless.

Welcome to Lit

With your first submit;

A bit weak/worn in the middle

But hey, it's those first steps that count;

Keep 'em coming!