All Comments on 'looks you don't see ...'

Liked this one alot,

Nicely set out,

good wording and

thought provoking!

There are few things I could point out that may need a "fix". Do you want me to? Yes? Okay. :) Even if you left the minor things alone, it's still a good poem.

Too many ellipses.

"but she didn't see

eyes under a distant eve"

Is that eve as in evening, or eve as in eave/s--an overhang?

Beginning with the 6th stanza, the story really develops into something interesting. It's a shame you can't condense the first 5 stanzas. Your best lines are in stanzas 3 and 4. The second half of the poem has a lot of potential. And I tell you this because I know you are a poet who is constantly seeking to improve his poetry, and I admire you for that.

I like this poem Arturo, I can think of a few more looks you don't see or don't want to see. A very good way of looking at things. I could actually say this may have "inspired" (as you would say), another poem. Nice poem Turo

How many times do artists look at the tiny small essence of a shadow in order to write, paint, dance, sing or communicate a passionate longing? Here is an excellent metaphor on just that note... Obvious write about the reality of life.. I agree with Eve.. the later part of the poem is the strength..

thanx Art

Du~

a deep one here, Art. This is piercing piece of work that made the wheels turn in my gray matter.