All Comments on 'BeachTime Lovin''

IMO the poem would be truer to it's title if the metaphors kept closer to that location. Not saying it's not hot- I get the heat! What beach did you say this is ;)

no surprise right? King Tut......a sand thing, I

think I got it. I like the rhymes hidden in here.

I thought it tripped a little just before the trout.

Then it recovered for a sunny finish. Location,

location, location I can't say it enough. You brought

back some memories. sandspike

some have a hard time accepting what anothers feel till they put their own twist into it. I for one like the pure emotional passion of the souls relaying its thoughts in its purest form. I absorbed your pen and tied up your muse <grin...(~_*) a very nice write

Your poem was mentioned in the New Poems Review Thread~

thanks for the literary journey~ Art~

enjoin your rite

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enjoin your rite

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I can feel the heat, the sand, the oil. How I'd love to feel the sex. "How tha hell do I get closer?" Oh, I been there.

Wonder what Brian Wilson would do with this. It all works....now, can I have a cool drink 'a wotah, please?