by Bill Dada
I love the power of the running together of the words creates. A fast current that in the end falls off a water fall of realities voice!
Hot damn~ good write!
Du~
mentioned on the Sunday reviews..
I wrote a stream-of-consciousness piece once and neither the poetry forum nor the story forum would touch it. I think your images (which are excellent!!)suffer by being run into each other so quickly; had you structured this more like a traditional poem it might have read better. Thanks.
Boo
of my winged nature,
I love this piece
of art,
so deliciously painted
to the pallete of my
senses...
-sGp-
Thanks for this one - this style is so in my head and in my heart at the same time.
Tending to lean with Boo on this; it's a bit choppy in its presentation, like stream of consciousness with a brutal editor run amuck.
Word run together ~ hit the mind like a Jackhammer ~ pounding out debris of meaning.