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you show seeds sown

in sight and scar down

under skin so long ago

such seens as to make us blind

and better for it, for now

these terrors live in on in us

so thanks for horrible beauty

a corpse lily for us to admire

I do and warm hands to your fire.

in the New Poems Review thread at Literotica's Poetry Feedback & Discussion forum

You really do have somethin' goin' on, new poet.

There are a lot os suggestions I might offer . . . little things (linebreaks, smoothing out, trimming). . . but you seem capable of working through those tiny things yourself.

One thing I will offer here - you should be experimenting with structure and line and strophe breaks . . . altering as you edit. You have a good feel, it seems to me - and some things will 'feel' better than others, things you may not have even tried when you wrote this. . . play around.

I hope you keep sharing your poetry.

One of those gut-wrenching pieces where salvation lies in running away and powerful memories are branded onto a child of four's brain.

She will remember, it's just that the edges won't be quite as ragged.

A poem of infinite sadness ~ with an everlasting sadness that will never be diminished.