All Comments on 'Alchemy'

I enjoyed reading this. I liked your language and imagery, think about changing the last stanza. I felt it was weaker, imho, then the other three.

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I am with the previous poster. In the last stanza you IMO unnecessarily ‘elevated’ the language to a meta- level, that is – compared with the previous three. On the SAME LEVEL of imagery you could have represented broken spells/powers. Still it’s a poem with a broken Alchemy – I mean in a GOOD way!

I'm of a different opinion. I like the rising heat of the stanzas and, rather than weak, find the last stanza strong. The poem as a whole speaks of growing experience, each stanza building on the last. In the final stanza the speaker has become elevated beyond the first three and now can comment on all of what has gone before. There is a detached quality about the last stanza, but there is still an eroticism here. It changes the tone of the poem, but I think the last stanza's unexpectedness makes it all the stronger. Excellent.