All Comments on '5 Kings Row'

is a fine narrative poem. I love the both the rythmn of your poem and the punchiness of your language, which creates effective images in the readers' mind; esp lines like

'Those borrowed walls

and spaces,

blinked

the tremble of our deeds

and lost motion.'

Great stuff. Mentioned in today's new poem reviews

you never fail to astonish ... I agree with vampiredust - this indeed is powerful - I like the phrase he mentioned, but what resonates with me is:

"and we grow weary

of our I ams,

and breathe the dust

of instead,"

there is just something so poignant about that ...

A fine retrospective tale told

Of a life well lived

With wistful recollections of a place

A long time ago.

Your word selection creates effective images in the readers' mind of long ago and far away. Powerful!