- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Like A Kite
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Like a kite
trusting in the hands that hold the string
I release my self
to the wonder of the wind.
- COMMENTS
WickedEveover 19 years agoYour poem is mentioned on the new poems review thread on the literotic poetry forum.
Reltneover 19 years agoI like this nice short image/thought. It is deeper than a reader might think at first.
I am intrigued by your use of "my self". Usually it is written as "myself", one word. Did you make it two on purpose? Separating does seem to emphasize the "Ego" sense of "self". This introduces another potential meaning for "release" and dimension for "the hands".
Rather than "cast your fate to the wind" this short little poem hints that there is a reason for the "wonder". It is also a good touch that you avoided "wonder of the world" and went with "wind", which also strengthens the kite metaphor.
You might considered changing the title to something such as "The kite", and make the simile unstated, but understood.
Thank you for a sharp image that makes me think.
