All Comments on 'Spent'

this made me feel nasty( in a good way), hurried and very content :)

but, I think, ( just my opinion) that the first part-- would be a bit better if condensed into fewer lines. I do understand the reasoning for short line, I do it often myself, but this would just "flow" easier, in my mind at least, lke this ( hope i didnt offend you by changing it for an example)

*Saturated, with cabbage roses

we swelter, grope and bask*

say I undo your calm collected

~~ I dont quite understand the "say I undo..." could you teall me what that means, or was it just an extra word..? youmight also want to avoid cliched terms such as "calm, collected" they are used so often.

I did enjoy this very much :)

lush, and evocative of tangled sheets, damp skin, and liquid filled air. I love the imagery of the lovers' cocoon where you can and do believe the rest of the world can just fuck off. Terrific! Thanks.

Awesome poem and easy to relate to. Great job, sexy~

Of red wine nights sweltering under the broken fan.

Love it and you.

I wish there weren't so many hundreds of thousands of poems here. This is pay dirt. I like it a lot, OMiss.

'with you inside me

I manage to believe

reality can fuck off'

TY,BD