by sack
"Gentle 'WORDS' reveal the exquisite inner structure"
hehehe...
wow what a poet, way to go sack~
awesome visuals of an unfolding flower into the day
then curl up into the dusk....moving...
and that's not a superficial comment cause I meant it
<grin> (~_*)
Silky crepe paper with a turquoise blush
Opens in a pinwheel of blinding brilliance~
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Oh how lovley. I loved the imagery here. Just makes ya want to sit an watch that all day. Wonderful poem. Just took root and grew healthy and sweet.
More Please~~!!
One that does not have a garden can in their minds eye live this flower's birth.. Rejoicing in it.. Even rejoicing at the end because for one bright moment it brought beauty into one's life.
Annora
Now that is how I expect poetry to be written!!
Clear, with vivid images left for us to conjure without being told every detail.
Awesomeeeeeee sack!! Bravo. ;-)
for saturday 27 2004
thank you for the journey~
and the tip~
(~_*)
As magnificent violet hues shimmer from within
While the gentle sunset illuminates the sky
The pleated petals fold under and shrink away
It is dusk
The flow was nice. Your words are beautiful. I really think these lines were my favorite but I enjoyed the whole thing:)
How like a life is a flower. It appears only for a little while then vanishes away like a vapor from a teakettle leaving only the minds memory ~ to recall. Lovely!
and such a pleasure to read. You captured it very well, thank you.