First Time Story Comments

"I was the quarterback! Lol"

That kind of writing really brings down the readability and quality of the writing. It's fake, unrealistic. Have you ever heard someone pronounce the end of a sentence as "lol"? If by chance you have, you probably thought the person was an imbecile.

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I wrote the story on notepad and copy pasted it paragraph by paragraph because the screen size was small on my laptop. I should have proof read. This is the first time I'm trying this

I too lost the first true love of my life at age 20, to something similar: brain damage, actually. I can totally relate to this story, and I must agree that this one was actually not fiction. The depictions were spot on, The pacing and character development here was exquisite. The...

A good second chapter to this series. So down on herself and doing everything she can to escape. Only Tim sees through this facade. Will he succeed in convincing her that she is worth his time? I hope so for all their sakes and ours.

I like the story, I like the style, I especially like an other chapter. :)

I keep reading, chapter to chapter. This is a great story Becca! You’re driving me crazy!

meh

What a hot couple. Time to meet mom and dad, she's a keeper!

Wonderfull loving storey. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

A hard nut to crack!

5

Great story and excellent sexual descriptions with a twist like the Freaky Friday vibe, really enjoyed reading it excellent story.

Nice comeback hsharon, I’m wondering what “cut paste” actually means?

Surely the anonymous grammar nazi didn’t omit the ‘and’ out of his rant?

I’ll watch out for part 2, thanks from Australia

This tale puts you in a top long story author status. Only the most talented writers are able to control a story of this length especially with all the body shifting going on. I have a firm spot in my heart and brain for Lily and Theo and hope that we might have a continued experience...

Yes, please write several more!

Yes to a part 2

that is my fantasy

What a great fun story. Very creative, you invented an interesting setup and the way it unfolded was great. Your dialog was well done. Loved it.

Sorry to those poor men who didn't find it realistic. LOL you guys.

Such a great story about a real problem. I've seen it in my daughter and a couple of her friends. This tale could have been written in text books about the care and feeding of young girls. I am assuming that there will be a follow up to this one that helps her overcome her insecurities...

Sure - part 2 would be very appreciated!

I most certainly do!

Loved the pun at the end!

You touched all my 'hot buttons'. M/M/F play is one of my favorite ways to enjoy hot wet sex.

wish my wife would bring someone home for me to suck

Simple story. Written in an easy way to read. Not a dramatic work of art, but enjoyable. I was able to relate to the story.

It's tough growing up!

5

Four teenagers grinning ear-to-ear. How lucky could they be? And with their parents' approval yet--they will have all the sex they ever dreamed of. It doesn't get much better than that. Great story. Glad I bumped into it.

PART 2 NOW

It would have helped if you had described what each of the characters looked like.

Unfortunately, too true a story. Can recall a few anecdotal episodes in my coaching experience of young ladies as is the protagonist of your story. Hope the subject of your tale is on the 'other side' of her journey.

It’s interesting to consider the aftermath of a first time and what it would look like from the other side, how potential future sexual encounters will compare to it. This story seems to have a more balanced view on the matter, that good sexual experiences can sometimes be rare, a...

Wow. That was amazing

Merci. I wouldn't mind at all exploring this young lady's further adventures with Isabelle and the other new friends she meets during her eye-opening trip abroad.

Love the chemistry here with these characters please bring on a chapter 3!

A great story with a lot of reality involved in it. Lots of truth and memories were present in people’s lives

Anonymous - thanks for pointing out the error. Is there s specific school of English that you are running where I could take a course to ensure that I have your blessing to "come back here"?