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Click hereI am dazed...
phone clatters to the floor
receiver squeaking with concern
ignoring the distant voices
I contemplate the flowers
they seem pale
wan
diseased
backed by crumbling wallpaper
duller still in my mind
the world is at half mast
as blood struggles to reach my brain
thoughts try to squeeze through
a quickly shrinking door
please let some of them free
please...let her live
then the sharp jaws menace
taking a toe, a foot, a leg
until I am just a crumb, dust, an asterisk
a reminder of myself
a shadow without a body
nothing
absolutely nothing
without her
You take the reader into the moment and make them live it with you. For myself,it brought back with vivid clarity, the instant I learned my mother had cancer. It seems strange to compliment someone on such a intensely personal moment..but of your writing of it..amazing. Intense. Heartbreakingly evocative. Thank you for sharing.
of family bonds and emotions of loss are strong and touching but , done with a sincere heart... so sorry about your sis...hope she can find the help she needs to help her through her journey...hugs.blue
First, I'm very sorry about your sister.
Some poems driven by this kind of emotion are lacking, as far as being poetic goes. But this very well written and powerful. One of your best.