Late Correspondence

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foehn
foehn
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    for the family of Daniel Methvin

Night, clear and terrible night
thrilled with innumerable suns:
now, we practically live there.

Daniel, where are you?

    i'm guarding a hospital full of iraqui children

Daniel, where are you?

    look for me in the eyes of my child
    help my wife

        *

Daniel, after your funeral I dreamed
you had a letter in your pocket.
You took it out to hand it to me.

    it hardly hurt at all

Two months later
it came:
    should i not come home
    i’ll be with you still
   in the stars


~

foehn
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The MuttThe Muttover 18 years ago
yes

Yes! Starts simply and builds to a nose-bloodying punch. This one got me good. It helps me to see that every one of those numbers I hear on the nightly casualty reports is a real person who leaves a huge hole when he is gone. I will look at the stars tonight.

Thanks.

btw- I don't vote or use therms.

sacksackabout 19 years ago
Amazing as always.....

Anything you do is touched with gold, I would only delete the second "night" in the first line...the poem is a little tighter without it.

Maria2394Maria2394about 19 years ago
ohhh

this gave me chills and brought tears to my eyes. I cannot even watch the news without feeling the same way. A wonderful, powerful poem. excellent work

annaswirlsannaswirlsabout 19 years ago
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very powerful, I like the switch from the first half to the second, and the switch to the imagined letter to the real one. unimaginable

impressiveimpressiveabout 19 years ago
Damn!

I've never had a poem move me to tears until this one. Exceptionally fine work, foehn. ~Imp

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