- Erotic Poetry
- Orange Glow
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Others came before you
just experiments really
You were my first true love
played around before
but never all the way
I’ll never forget that night
the soft orange glow
from a space heater
caressed our skin
highlighted your eyes
as you looked into mine
and I knew I would love you
forever
I still do, you know
though we are connected
only by fiber optics
world wide web
electronic mail
Sometimes you come to me
in my mind
Sometimes I come for you
by my hand
as you thrust into me
nothing between us
but your cock
and a soft orange glow
- COMMENTS
JonasRobinsonover 4 years agoThat's the sort of emotion I feel for my first true love. I enjoyed this because of its wit and elegance. Thank you for sharing. :)
Piscatorover 9 years agoof a long distance e-relationship. John Prine's "Donald and Lydia" came to mind.
MarkHughesalmost 11 years agoI loved this. It is subtle, understated, properly poetic - then those last lines deliver an erotic shock. Beautiful.
Having seen other comments, I can only say that I am of the school of thought that says you need the cock to be in (sorry).
Bill Dadaabout 19 years agoI don't understand the complaints about the last stanza. I can't imagine the poem without the last stanza just like it is. I also can't imagine love without lust, erotism without raunchy. There are other erogenous zones besides the mind.
Sappholoversalmost 20 years agoI feel our first loves, crushes, infatuations, intense erotic experiences sear something into our memory, wire us up in ways that we never forget. The coils of a space heater thus make a good image in my mind for this.... not as cliched as the glow of a fire. The poem hit the right notes for me.
YDDabout 20 years agoI find the final stanza to break the mood.
I would prefer something gentler such as:
"Sometimes you come to me
in my mind
Sometimes I come for you
by my hand
there is nothing between us
as you thrust
but a soft orange glow"
tarablackwood22about 20 years agoDrop the second to last line, and I think it's perfect...you'd better consult Charlie first, though.
Kundalinguiniabout 20 years agoExquisite... the glow of the space heater on your skin, the reflection in your eyes, coming in your hand at the memory. All so very erotic. As the heart of poetry is capturing an image, the form and emotion, in words, this is poetry, heartfelt and memorable.
jthserraabout 20 years agowith such an etheral beauty that carried through until the second to last line. While I longed a bit for some punctuation, it did flow well though the stunning imagery. I only wish that one line was two words shorter. Call me a prude, but you had a wonderfully erotic, sensuous poem. The word has it's place in poetry, but this poem was good enough to stand without the shock. 99.9% good, .1% bad...
jim : )
Vampiric_Mirageabout 20 years agoYour first love can never truly be forgotten and can never be compared to. This poem captures the spirit of first love and the memories that often will linger for a lifetime, for better or for worse...well done.
